Promise Me

In Response to Vanessa's (Βανέσα) poem "Being" Inspired....

If you promise 

never 

To leave 

my side 

Sharing

 

with me 

the burden 

of my 

broken shoulders 

If you promise 

never 

To leave 

my side 

Until the night's 

ascending 

Into a new dawn 

If you promise 

never 

 

To leave 

my side 

 

In this 

whole world of 

miseries 

Then 

 

I would 

Let you 

Be.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

' f you promise ~ never ~ To leave ~ my side ~
Sharing .. '

Tis hard to leave someone's side when promises have been made somewhere else. Who's ever to know. There's both sadness and hope in this.. sometimes the two don't walk hand in hand.

A superb post, a very rational yet sensvtive way of being that not everyone has and some are too blind to accept.. .

(please forgive my typos. so very careless)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'd say promises are harder kept but made easily enough...
Thank you for appreciating, Em. This was more of a post inspired by another post of a fellow writer. Thank you too for your insight here (:

[Bala Gorthi]

Expectations from our loved people . Very relatable. Very well penned, Yumnakay.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Bala, for the kind words and appreciation. 😊

[Bala Gorthi]

You are welcome.

[Lotus Flower]

Wow, this speaks to me mi cherié. It gives off a more wistful vibe so many promises....either way it goes I liked it. Great job

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, my friend! I'm glad you liked it. 😊

[Ardra]

mmmm so many things we want them to promise...
isnt it... i can relate to these words quiet well...
simple yet sweet poem yumna...
but i guess promises are always meant to be broken.... some or the other day mostly by the ones you love and hold close to you..
what do you think

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I would say it depends on the situations of that person too. Many a times, we don't want to break promises, but we're forced to. And that doesn't mean we're not loved or that we don't love back. It means we're being tested.
Thank you, Ria, for adding your thoughts here and for liking this inspired piece. I appreciate it. 😊

[Ardra]

mmmm :) ya maybe ... depends on who makes the promise and their intention behind it too...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True......