Promise Me

In Response to Vanessa's (Βανέσα) poem "Being" Inspired....

If you promise 

never 

To leave 

my side 

Sharing

 

with me 

the burden 

of my 

broken shoulders 

If you promise 

never 

To leave 

my side 

Until the night's 

ascending 

Into a new dawn 

If you promise 

never 

 

To leave 

my side 

 

In this 

whole world of 

miseries 

Then 

 

I would 

Let you 

Be.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

' f you promise ~ never ~ To leave ~ my side ~
Sharing .. '

Tis hard to leave someone's side when promises have been made somewhere else. Who's ever to know. There's both sadness and hope in this.. sometimes the two don't walk hand in hand.

A superb post, a very rational yet sensvtive way of being that not everyone has and some are too blind to accept.. .

(please forgive my typos. so very careless)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'd say promises are harder kept but made easily enough...
Thank you for appreciating, Em. This was more of a post inspired by another post of a fellow writer. Thank you too for your insight here (:

[barleygirl]

I might be too jaded to see your msg in a hopeful light. To me, this sounds like a puzzle where one runs into the same head-knocker no matter which door is taken. Promising to never leave someone's side is pure folly in my book. There are so many ways life cannot be predicted or controlled. In effect, I'm reading your poem as a warning that nobody will ever be allowed in, since the premise of constant companionship is impossible to fulfill. Your poem feels like the ultimate irony, but it might just be me! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Ghania]

Yet, these promises are really kept.
But wow! You've a talent to pen down those sentiments!
Great!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh, it was more of a response to a friend's write here than my own thoughts, but I'm glad you like it. Thank you so much for appreciating :)
Nice to see you back around here (:

[Ghania]

Yes. I read that, you've written that above. But actually, I read this first before reading the actual poem.
Cheers anyway! :P

[Dr. YumnaKay]

;P you couldn't read that one anyway now 'cause she's left WC now sadly...

[Ghania]

Oh thanks. My classes are going to start and MBBS isn't really a piece of cake for me. (who knows better than you, Doctor XD )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

ah but of course, that's tough af though I have a degree in BDS ;) kinda strayed away from doing MBBS lool too hectic, but I'm glad you opted for that :))

[Ghania]

Oh, but we've to study the same in 1st year either it's MBBS or BDS. Still it's hectic.
Thanks. :))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

yes, though I had a semester system not prof, dk about you though still I'd say BDS is a lot easier than the former. At least no emergency duties lool

[Ghania]

Oh yes! No emergency duties! That's really relaxing for you.
You didn't have prof. ? Wow. it's not semester system her in Punjab. You did from Karachi?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yup, I did. It reverted back to prof system this year after I graduated haha but whatever, at least I got through ;P
I wouldn't say relaxing exactly but at least I can sleeep at nights hahahah

[Ghania]

ha ha! Good for you, But still teeth aren't easily handled.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

*groan* yeah true that. Nothing is easy really

[Ghania]

Ha ha Ha. Best of luck. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You too, my friend (;

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

promises only most will be broken and the few will be forgotten, the rest? Those have true value

[Dr. YumnaKay]

So there would still be promises left even after them being forgotten and broken? Seems unlikely..

[Mr.Writer]

This is amazing!! Wow... seriously Yumna! This is really well worded, the words flow really well, no forced words...
I like this a lot!
Keep it up!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Shaan! This really was a response to a fellow writer's poem, so no brilliance on my part lol
But I'm glad you liked it :)

[Sonsnow]

Promise me it self is a beautiful title and would love to write on this topic very much,,,,,,,,,,so glad of reading your poem and it gave me the greatest gift of idea to do something special,,,,,,

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad it gave you the inspiration to write. Thank you for your kind words and thoughts 😊

[Isabella Ivy]

I like this: sincere, simplistic, sweet. I.I.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Isabella! You're very kind. I appreciate your words 😊

[Isabella Ivy]

Thank you! You as well :)

[Tbear]

one stone at a time, pile of promises, you will remain strong.. lovely style .. write on..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree! Thank you! I'm glad you like it 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

Kind, hopeful and gentle words and questions. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to proper ending. Thank you dear poet for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Coyote! Your appreciation means a lot to me 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

I love your work and you are welcome.

[Csimmons]

WOW that is incredible. Just truly a work of art

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm glad you like it 😊