Till Death Do Us Apart

I suck at love poems :p

I love you

I love you too

I miss these words

coming from you

while we didn't even look

at each other

when I would be looking at the sky 

searching for the brightest star

to ask what I wished the most

you

Only to find

you lookin' right at me 

'cause maybe you found it

in my very eyes

what you wished for

me

And we vowed

till death do us apart

and that it did 

you've been afar for too long

but like a constant ache

that never subsides

because

Pain demands to be felt

and that I feel

constantly reminding me

that maybe 

we would still have been together 

this valentine's day...

Author's Note

I wanted this to be a valentine's day special.. Apparently didn't work lol

Reviews

[Shabeeh Haider]

There is no feeling that is sweeter than looking into someone's eyes and seeing a reflection of your own love there.
But somewhere along the road things go wrong and we are left with sorrow and regrets.
The pain of your words are so evident in this beautiful poem.
I wish you all the best for the coming Valentine's day.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I intended to right a normal love poem but it didn't work that way.. But it's good to know you could feel the emotions here! Thank you so much for liking and reviewing this piece, Shabeeh! Means a lot ☺

[Shabeeh Haider]

All poems written from the heart are "normal"'.
What ever the theme of your poem, the love is evident and you are celebrating that love.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Quite a perspective! I appreciate that..

[TeeJae {TJ} Hart]

Very much agree shabeeh

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you T J for agreeing

[Great Aunt Astri]

You portray the feeling of an archetypal love very well. And the 'constant ache 'that comes when all does not go to plan. But, such is life. I enjoyed this well written poem.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating this old write. Glad you enjoyed 😊

[Carol Cashes]

This is a love letter and perfect for Valentine's Day. I found this charming, then sad, then glad that the writer had, at least, known great love. You took the reader from one extreme to the other. Cool.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, tis one of my older writes which were written just as words and no real feeling, Carol. So at that time, I hadn't known love lol :p
Thank you for appreciating and your words here. 😊

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

I wonder who the culprit behind this is... I wonderrrr...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Nah.. There was none. These are again just words 😉

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Ahhhhhh, I see!

[Jamey]

Pain demands to be felt..it is quite the motivator

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It is.. Thank you! ☺

[thetish]

Lovely, poetic- a real treasure.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! Glad you liked it ☺

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

YumnaKay, I loved this beautiful prose poetry. Touching and vivid!
I loved the painful truth and the honest tone.
PS: I just felt the picture didn't go very well with the piece though. Otherwise great!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah I feel so too! But I'm just too lazy to remove it lol
Thank you for liking Jyoti! Glad you could feel the emotions here!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome! :)

[Adil]

"And we vowed
till death do us apart
and that it did
you've been afar for too long
but like a constant ache
that never subsides"

Beautifully described..Thanks for sharing..!!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it ☺

[Kesha]

I really liked it, it was quite heartwrenching, it's very sad to lose someone you loved. Nicely written

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It is indeed! Thank you for liking this one as well! Means a lot ☺

[Kesha]

You're welcome :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Those love poem can start sweet and end with words of a broken heart and wish. I like the powerful emotions leading to honest thoughts and a wish at the end. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Coyote, for feeling the emotions here! I truly appreciate your words ☺

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Poet.

[Tony Jordan]

Intensely bitter-sweet. The sentiments in the first half are pure romance and like life itself often does, it turned sour.
It takes on a life of it's own.
Well done - well purged - well expunged dear poet.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, TJ! My emotions just got jumbled in this one..
Still, thank you for liking this one as well ☺