Irony

Just ranting about..

There comes a time in life 

When you want to laugh 

But the only thing that comes 

Are tears 

Flowing endlessly 

And the irony is 

That you don't even know 

The reason behind them 

It's not as if you are unhappy 

Nay.. You have everything 

Within reach 

Everything that you wished for 

At an arm's length 

And then you realize 

What's missing..

It's peace,

Calm and comfort.

And then you find yourself

Groping blindly 

Fearing that you would fall 

Walking alone

https://soundcloud.com/user-557255780/coffee-with-underhill-01-23-2017 

Thank you J Todd Underhill for reading out my little piece ☺

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

All of us find this place.
"And then you realize
What's missing?
It's peace,
Calm and comfort."
I believe we learn real wisdom. When we learn. Can't make everyone happy and we must find something to do. We enjoy. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree, eventually we do although it takes time.
Thank you, Coyote, for your thoughts and appreciation :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right and you are welcome.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Great poem. I love it. thanks for sharing your talent.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating 😊

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Groping blindly, now that's a line!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think I finally got you somewhat impressed by my style haha thank you 😊😊

[Giulia King]

Beautifully written, dear friend! I relate to everything! Everything's stressing us out, these days. Having peace, calm and comfort feels like luxury.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It's a luxury indeed but can we afford that's the question..
Thank you for your thoughts and appreciation, Gullia! Means a lot 😊

[Paul Bell]

I think with the pace of life now.
When we get to much time, we begin to panic because we don't know what to do with it.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I don't think it's got anything to with time. It's about the situations we are in and the human nature of never being content with what we have, always wanting more..
Thank you for sharing your thoughts here. I appreciate it.

[Lyn Anderson]

There are a lot of wonderful thoughts here, written in a clear conversational tone, it has an underlying melancholy and longing which are effective. I would have but two minor suggestions -- to perhaps change emits for flows -- and I think you meant, "What's missing is peace" Unless you meant "What's missing?" "It's peace." A subtle difference that would polish this poem up very nicely. PS if you are offended by positive suggestions I will bow out gracefully -- as I always leave helpful hints to writers whose work I believe is worthy of the help.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Nah I purely appreciate criticism. Anything to help me get better as I'm new to this.
And you are right about the 'what's missing?' I'll correct it thank you ☺
Don't you think if I changed 'emit' with 'flows', there will be a repitition of the same word? As in I've written 'flowing' in the next line...
Thank you for the kind words and for liking ☺

[Lyn Anderson]

You are right about the repetition -- the only thing that comes? the only thing that springs forth? the only thing that appears? emits is just an odd word to describe tears.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hm I googled it and you are right.. Will change it ☺

[Lyn Anderson]

this is what I mean about the subtle nuances -- not so much in pure meaning, but intent. English is the easiest, and also the hardest, language in the world, all at once.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Easiest hah you could see how people here try to excel in it 😂

[Lyn Anderson]

Anyone can speak it. But speak it, and use it, well? A whole other story.:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Totally agree!

[Lauren Sarah]

I feel like I can really connect to this. I really appreciate your honesty in your words and feelings!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad you could connect to what I feel.. Thank you for your kind words! Truly appreciated ☺

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Wonderful insight brought forth here!

Nice writing!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it ☺

[ReedWrite]

yes, I have been here too...sometimes I still find myself in this place. Even after leaving a toxic marriage...moving on...finding a measure of happiness...with my children and grandchildren around me...a good job...food and roof over my head...all the things I need to be happy...sometimes I feel a deep, soul-burning emptiness inside, and I don't know why. I think our souls cry out for something we don't always understand...something we seldom acknowledge. And while we can ignore it most of the time, there are moments it sifts to the surface and speaks to us...and then the tears come, as we mourn that which we cannot name, or understand. Beautiful poem, Yumna.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I read somewhere 'seek and ye shall find', sadly that is not always the case... So even though it seems to the outer world that we haave everything, we are left pondering over what is missing and therein lies the irony..
Thank you for liking this one! Oh and btw I don't know your name? 😛

[ReedWrite]

My name is Pam.
I write/publish under the name: P.L. Reed.
:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh that's cool, Pam! ☺

[Somewhere]

Hi, thank you for your review on Soul Collision. I've read several of your writings, they all speak to me, they speak to who I used to be, but this one, this one in particular hit home. I enjoyed reading your thoughts, and reading into your soul throughout all I read. I would just like to tell you that you are LOVED. I too could find no peace, no calm for many years of my life, many more then I care to count. Take this for what it's worth, but I did not find my peace until I sought God. So I feel your pain and it hurts me to the core. Seek him hun, I promise he will bring you peace.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well, at the moment, nothing helps.. But I believe there will come a day when I will find peace still it feels impossible..
Thank you for your kind words here! They mean alot to me!
And it was a pleasure reading your works too ☺

[Somewhere]

:-) with God all things are possible! Be good to yourself!