Desires

Becoming wild..

Burning desires 

creeping up my veins,

fluttering heart, 

no longer in chains ...

Oh, why so surprised?

No, I'm not on cocaine.

This is the real me, 

no longer with restrains.

Come f**k me, 

'cause I'm already fucked up ...

until my brain ~ drains.

Reviews

[D Connolly]

This is definitely a change from some of your other poetry; I was a little shocked at your use of the word "f**k" because I so rarely see it. I'm curious about the language you've used in a few parts. "Burning desire" paired with the "no I'm not on cocaine". If you would, why did you choose those specific words? This is a nice departure for you, though I do like your softer side too :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well that departure from the normal was brought by the fact that I wanted to try my hand in every genre of writing.. Not sure if it worked.. About that word of 'cocaine' and 'f**k', well just me being on the playful and wild side 😂
Thank you for liking and reviewing this piece! This means alot ☺

[Neville]

Shame but at least a taste of freedom is better than no taste at all.........N

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hm well yes..😊

[Relic]

I wanted to read you tonight so I picked this at random. My, My, I had no idea your desires were that strong. lol Feeling unrestrained is another way of telling the truth. Your honesty here is one I applaud. :)

Nice one, Dr.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha reading this piece now is kinda embarrassing 'cause it was just a spur in the moment kind of write :x :P
I'm glad you like it though. Thank you so much for reading, Tim. :-)

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Whoa! Someone really is getting a little wild here. I haven't really seen this side of you Yumna

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh oh this side of mine is probably more like your Mr. Pulse one 😉😛 it's sleeping these days (thankfully)
Glad you caught a glimpse of it 😉😊

[Jes' Pi]

"Come f**k me
'cause I'm already fucked up"
Those lines sounded like a rap song, or something like that. You done a very good job. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hmm interesting.. I didn't think of those lines as that. 😛
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 😊😊

[Ardra]

F**k me until my brain drains hahahah...loved it yumna....
Quiet a clear cut advice....no nonsense...
A very different one from ur usual ones....I did have a laugh...imagining it ;) better do it or get lost lol .. kind of msg

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah yeah!!! You interpreted it the right way 😂😉
Thank you for the fun review, Ria! Made me laugh too 😊😊

[Jstmds]

Nice! I like the way you worte this and that you dared to use some strong language. Quite unique indeed.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! Well its good to be the rogue one for a while 😉
I'm glad you liked it ☺

[Crimson_ish]

Quite an interesting write up, I love it! Great work :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it ☺

[barleygirl]

I like using a little bit of swearing to make a point or to convey a certain kind of raw feeling. Using too much vulgarity makes a message sound coarse, but you've got the balance just right here. When I was in my 20's, I used to work & go to college, very stressed, & I would say that sex was what I needed to relax. This is what the end of your message reminds me of. Sometimes sexual release is the best medicine & the best way to get a fucked-up brain to relax & empty out . . . replacing stress with bliss. Not sure if you are using "restrains" wrong on purpose . . . it sounds OK here the way you have it . . . but the correct way would be "restraints" (which also works). Another way to use this word "restrains" . . . "This is the real me, unrestrained" . . . but it's also OK the way it is (((HUGS)))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, that 'restrains' word was on purpose.. But being a little shallow, I let it be 😉
Thank you for your kind words.. I have come to regard you with greater respect than I ever pay anyone 😊
P.S I still have to experience it, so I have to make do with words til then 😂

[Michael X]

wow, powerful, raw, and speaks volumes, definitely on expressive surreal side of of the poetic line, I like this alot!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it ☺

[Neville]

Wow, now she's free it seems & red font too. A delicious & tantalizing little deviation from her usual style & I like it. Keep em coming.....N

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol Neville.. Just for that moment 😉
I feel caged again now😂
Thank you for liking this one 😊