Arrows Against Humanity

In collaboration with Nickdykstra....

Arrows of brutality attack our fragile society, 

From the negativity it has caused a tragedy. 

Life is precious and desperate so tread lightly, 

Many have been struck by arrows of insanity.  

Created by man the arrow is designed purposely, 

Deflecting these arrows can be catastrophe.  

In order to maintain our sanity, 

We need to fight to bring out the positivity. 

 

For it's also a mankind's gift 

To spread discord and enmity 

Arrows of brutality attack us, 

coming ever so near of ripping our hearts apart. 

What is the purpose, one may ask  

Except to render them incapable of humility.

Life is precious and desperate, so tread ever so slightly. 

Hear the anxious cries of dying humanity... 

Nicholas Dykstra©2016 

Yumna Karim©2016

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a fine cohesive collaboration, full of sane references and a calm summation of facts and emotions.

Your poem whispers what's been screamed for years. Warnings, advice, pleas, and so forth have rarely if ever worked for more than a breath. The Flood didn't alter Civilisation's fiercely uncivilised behaviour. Seems only self-destruction will. But nobody will remain to record the aftermath.. such is humanity's evil. Perhaps.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I've always thought that too, about the time when real action against such evils would take place instead of just breathing out mere words...
Thank you for your wise words here, Emma and for appreciating this collab (:

[LazerRays]

To me personally, I find this your (and who you collabed with) best poem. Super good! I love this so much! Like Avril from 2000!
Soooo gooood! Love it!!!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It has been a while since I looked into this piece but reading it now feels like I wrote this years ago and certainly a different person than what I am today lol and yeah it was a fellow writer here, sadly he isn't active around here anymore.
Thank you so much for reading and aopreciating this one, Sarah! 😊

[LazerRays]

Haha, I only comment on non-structured poems

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I have too many non-structured poems/prose. Don't worry, I only got hitched to structures recently lool 😉😛

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Ah, casting the bow and arrow of will and strength

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for checking this one out :))

[Michael G. Smith]

I hate those arrows of life but, I'd rather have them than the bullets, lol. Some profound things to think about here.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I would rather take the bullets lol 😛
Thank you! I'm glad it made you think 😊

[Michael G. Smith]

Why the bullets?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well, it would be once and for all, right? No regrets or sorrows...

[JayDee]

Deep... intense... Love it! Makes one really think hahaha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm glad it made you think ☺

[Lorry]

I really like how this turned out. It speaks of the arrow of brutality, yet leaves it to the readers personal viewpoint to fill in those blanks, which all boil down to the same thing, for too long we have followed the path of greed, which only has one task, to hold others back so the few get ahead. Nicely captured.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for the deep insight! Really appreciate it ☺

[Lorry]

You're always welcome.

[Nickdykstra]

Poem puts that smile from ear to ear, :D , great work we did , thank you for the time taken to read this work.looking foward to many great upcoming opportunities. ~Nick

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes me too 😊

[The dark story]

Man has worked ever so hard to evolve the 'arrow' into something more destructive. The agony man inflicts on man, the sanity plundered by the serpents of all different kinds of madness- humanity cry, but holds on strong to fight it back to see the next morning sunshine. Despair isn't an option.
This is a wonderful piece, echoing the silent screams around us. Thanks for sharing.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree on every account.. Thank you for your insight on this piece.. Really appreciate it ☺

[YanZeros]

This is the sad truth of this world, chaos caused by humanity. Very well written poetry Nicholas Dykstra and Yumna Karim! Hope to read more of this collaboration :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Yan! I agree..we can only practice a positive approach to not let the worse take us over.. Thank you for liking and reviewing...

[YanZeros]

But do know Cupid got an arrow too! you're welcome!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah! That arrow won't affect me😉

[YanZeros]

Poor Cupid...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol 😂😂😂

[Miss Sharon]

A powerful write you two. Very emotional, well written and sadly...so very true of the world in which we live. ~Sharon

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think the same.. Thank you Miss Sharon, for our appreciation! It means alot ☺

[Miss Sharon]

You are most welcome my fellow wordsmith. ~Sharon