Oceans

Oceans

A Chapter by Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse
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Just feels and writes.

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In such waters that meet no end

That stream through channels, they twist and bend

There pumps emotion that flows in waves

Splish and Splash the truth it caves


It tickles my sand as the crescents run

They tease and amuse just for fun

But I think she's sunk in Ocean depth

Perhaps she was already met by death


If so, don't float, let your body blend

Inside such cavern where emptiness send

The wastes and forgotten of all these tears

Who laughs of passion, who enrage my fears


No Ocean is deeper than the one I'm in

It carries faces with which I have sinned

You will fail in the attempt to find its art

For this vast Ocean, of the world is not a part

The place you look for is asleep in my heart's... Oceans

 



© 2017 Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse


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Smooth flow, really like this Drift.
Feels like a journey of past, present and future.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Ah, it looks like our waters arent so far, but of course you are able to swim, I hope :)
Papaya

7 Years Ago

I'm part fish.
Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

oh a mermaid? It would be an honor to swim next to such a beauty
A good metaphorical usage in this one. The flow and meter needs some editing/crafting. Rhyming is often difficult as the trap is to find a phrase to fit the rhyme at the expense of provenance.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Yes thank you, though I wasnt trying to make it structured, but I will keep it in consideration. I a.. read more
"The place you look for is asleep in my heart's... Oceans"

This is deep! And brilliantly so. I feel each of us carry more depth than the ocean itself...
Beautiful write, Sire. I enjoyed reading this :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

I enjoyed you being around, princess. Yes, we all have our own Oceans, and ironically we dont even k.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Years Ago

true.. I think I'll probably drown haha :P
This is the second poem i read from you, the first one had me wanting to bash you and accuse you of disgrace and tell you how lousy and wasteful your atempt was (with kindness of coarse) but was too lazy to type something. Now this one had me wanting to curse you with the worst of dictionary for prooving me wrong. You have quite brilliantly crafted a marvellous piece, i am honored to read your genuine and inspiring work. You are not just a story teller my friend your are an artist too.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Ah, you honor me my friend, you really do with those twisting confusing words, lol (in a good way) I.. read more
Saud Maroof

7 Years Ago

You got to bait a fish before you praise its wits.

A pleasure
Good.... Great.... Awesome, your very good my man... Wonderful imagery in this, thanks for sharing this deeply poetic piece

Poeticme

Posted 7 Years Ago


They tease and amuse just for fun
But I think she's sunk in Ocean depth
Perhaps she was already met by death

The ocean it has its own language isn't it ..



Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

It has many wonderful things. I wish to dive Ocean Deep, will I see you there? 😉
very well written.
an inspirational one for any reader

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much for the kindness
Definitely one of my favorites from you. "Who laughs of passion, who enrage my fears" Hmmm

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

For some reason I laughed

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Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

Worcester, MA



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My writing is strongly based on science, culture, myths and fantasy. I do enjoy poem writing but short stories are my passion, I am developing a few novels as well. I am looking for any critique that .. more..

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