The Bitter End II: Sweet Returns

This is a poem answering the poem The Bitter End by Nini

Dear Stone that I have left behind

The Wine has fermented, I cannot lie

Stars are but rocks I've placed above

They land on grounds reached only by doves

But as that day my stone carved soft

Realizing late what you were speaking of

I decide to return slowly, melting away

As from stone I have been sculpted back to clay

More lips planted on this stained cheek

My heart I've twisted to remain meek

The clay melting, rubber I became

As love slipped away from my true aim

It was you I knew, It was you I want

And now made rubber, with lighting I have fought

Though it brought no pain, out came the tear

Of leaving you as stone and alone in fear

Now breaking the gum I melt once more

to reach you as Man once and for sure

Though your heart made stone allow me to break

Pressurize it to diamonds for you to keep safe

I swear my love, another one I will make.

Author's Note

Please read the poem before this inspiration: The Bitter End by Nini

Reviews

[RSB]

I really like this line

More lips planted on this stained cheek

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Thank you very much, kindly and humbled

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I read both the poems and I think it's a wonderful contrast. Especially loved these lines:

"Stars are but rocks I've placed above
They land on grounds reached only by doves"

Beautifully crafted. Makes me think when will you cease to amaze me with your talents... :P
Loved reading this :))

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Thank you for grasping those lines

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Sire 😊😊

[Coyote Poetry]

A epic journey in he words. I had to read again. I like the story told and the open ending and the promise. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Thank you Coyote, its been a while since Ive stopped by to pay you a visit

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Arky]

Very bitter indeed. Love the use of rock and clay.

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Thank you very much for the humble review, make sure to read my fellow poets poem as well for a much clearer understanding of this one.

[Inject Positivity]

Excellent job! A poetic voice speaks out loudly yet softly declaring love... The last line was very impactful in the context of the poem. I liked your word choices too, and I went to check out the poem by Nini to understand where it came from because I didn't know anything about your poem at first... Very beautiful write... Well done...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Thank you, Im glad you checked out the other poem for understanding

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This is such an incredibly good poem Drift! Well done!

[QuayvonS]

"Dear Stone that I have left behind
The Wine has fermented, I cannot lie
Stars are but rocks I've placed above
They land on grounds reached only by doves"

COME ON NOW!!! That whole allusion in comparison with how Nini described it in "The Bitter End" is breathtaking! The charachter in this has matured over time and you can really embrace the growth they're experiencing. I love how you restart the cycle stone, to clay, to rubber. A brilliant analogy and imagery!

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Thank you very much for taking a look at both pieces to fully understand this response to an excellent poem! I appreciate it.

[QuayvonS]

Of course, it was well done!