Desirous Triumvirate

Desirous Triumvirate

A Chapter by Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

II shot the Moon
Shot that sucker and bled it Red
The deadly intentions that my thoughts fed
II couldn't stand being covetous inside
The other she loved and for He she died
All around she'd swiftly go
again embrace my attracting glow
teasing and running, she wouldn't stop
my gun shot loose a bang and pop

No, I shot the Moon
Shot the poor thing and all its Swoon
No love for Him or Me any time soon
She, gone at last, but still shines out
no matter how many stars I pluck down
the darkened sky still red with blood
But I feel no remorse, carry her out on a horse
Float her in the galaxy wave
she still couldn't have been saved

Yes, I did, II
shot the Moon
but then... I
shot Him too.
For II Love her
...still 


© 2017 Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse


Author's Note

Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse
Vengeance, if I cant act, I can write. Second edition

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that's interesting. so you're trying to justify having shot anyone because you're in love....
I liked these lines a lot :
"II couldn't stand being covetous inside
The Sun she loved and for he she died"

Vengeance seems sweet sometimes...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

It does, it really does. :)
This reads very well, i felt like the words melted together.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

I am greatly appreciative!
I just flicked my radio to some really cool laid back jazz and then I began to read and by f*ck if the music and the poem didn't start to integrate.
That's what this feels like - some fine jazz poetry Sir. Awesome!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I can't take credit for that phrase Drift. It's been around since the 1920's (Ezra Pound et al) but .. read more
Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Im pumping some jazz right now! Lets see what your writing sings to me
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Try 'Spent' - I'd be interested to hear your thoughts
This is epic, a surreal flow that I like a lot and a mysterious piece, really cool and much enjoyed :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much for that beautiful comment. I shall take a look at your profile, thanks for the .. read more
Ruth

7 Years Ago

My pleasure :)
damn, this is like a love poem meets Jimi Hendrix' "Hey Joe"

"i shot my old lady, shot her down to the ground"
she was my moon...but then she wasn't anymore and i couldn't take it.

intriguing piece.

j.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Mr. Jacob! I'm a fan of Jimi Hendrix so this is my favorite comment! It is surely a melodramatic poe.. read more
This is sweet and has an endearment you don't often know how to express well at least I don't... Yeah I'm pathetic although I will say this your writing is beautiful

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Oh no, don't say that, I admire all reviews and yours is very well accepted. Im reading your writing.. read more
I love this poem and wonder about the underlining meaning. I could only guess! The rhyme is so easy to read and is almost a song in my head as i read. Great poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much for stopping by!

I like the direction this piece moved towards and the twist in the end. I was confused with the “II” which I realize was “I” thereafter. Good



Posted 7 Years Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Thank you, the double II was to note that the speaker was 2 persons at the same time, one that loved.. read more
This. Is. Love! Sometimes rhyming can be challenging and constricting but you seem to make everything fit just right.
Again, Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Very different from the children's story of yours that I read. I love the strength and determination this man has, the things he will do for love. That is awesome.
That is love. It makes you crazy enough to do crazy things.

Posted 7 Years Ago


...

7 Years Ago

I look forward to the summer heat then...
Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse

7 Years Ago

Stay close, just don't get burned 😉
...

7 Years Ago

Don't worry. I'm way too cool. :)

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