If only you

If only you, saw

That we could've had it all.

If only you, knew

That I wrote all those songs for you.

If only you,  listened

To all those things I had to say.

If only, you

Gave me a chance.

If only.

Author's Note

Eh. :

Reviews

[Aimee Mahathy]

Wow I like this!
I think the pauses caused by the unique spacing, and the rhyme.. it creates a kind of suspense. Like a pause, to really let the honesty of the emotion sink in. Like when you're saying something so personal like "Do you see?" and you stare at the person, pierce them with your eyes to their soul, to -really- ask the question. That's how it makes me feel. It's amazingly effective. I don't know if you meant for it to be like that, but it is. And I'm in admiration~

[Krazy On The Outside]

A-MAZ-ING!!!
It's so pretty, Cheeky! =)

[DreamSharer]

This was a nice way to start the day! I was happy with the sweet emotions put into this poem. Well done! I look forward to reading more of your work.

[A.M. Everlasting]

Wow, Nums. I really, really love this...Written about anyone I know? lol

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

If only, I guess we all have those and maybe we have people who pine over us (sigh) anyhow well done.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

this is amazing ... i like it

[Ron Hogan]

Not bad, though I don't like the use of commas. If you really wanted to use punctuation after "If only you," I'd suggest a colon, instead: not only is it more grammatically correct, but it would make reading the poem less awkward.