Crying

Crying,

All alone,

In the corner,

You just know your,

Dying.

Reviews

[Lizardo]

This is so true, although I had to contain myself, but I would prefer crying because my pain leaves with the tears and cries for help.
The dying part was a bit dark.
Enjoyable poem!

[potato]

Thank you.

[luvs2write]

The shortness of this poem made it all the more powerful. I know how it feels when you just think you're going crazy and this is the end. If I might offer a suggestion (and you don't have to use it...I think it's just opinion, really)...you may want to instead of saying
"You just know you're,
Dying." If you would skip the comma, it would read more like "You just know you're dying." Rather than with the comma it sounds like "You just know you're *pause* dying." I dunno...I'm probably not even making any sense. Anyway, I really enjoyed this. I love short poems, they are so often more powerful than longer ones. Great work and keep writing!!

[potato]

Thank you. And I see what you mean. I will probably go back and make a few changes. Most of my stuff is just random things I write in math class to be honest.

[luvs2write]

Lol, in math? I write in class too. =)