Prologue

 The moon was full and bright in the sky, light was beaming onto the worn and cracked asphalt, and yet the night felt so dark and gloomy. My heart was beating on overdrive and my blood was pumping so quickly that I was worried that the creature standing in front of me was able to hear. It lifted its slightly disconnected head and let out such an unearthly and terrifying shriek that I couldn’t help but wince. Little by little, soldier after soldier appeared and stood at solute behind their commander, readying themselves for a battle of all battles- a battle between monsters from horror movies and the human race. Another ear splitting scream was released, and the army charged. “Now?” He said a little uncomfortably. “Not yet,” I replied. Footsteps sounded from behind me. I turned to see the calm and determined face that was my trusty librarian. I couldn’t help but say, “You’re late.” He looked behind me at the approaching enemies. “Yeah, sorry about that.”  I nodded my head with a small grin and turned around to make sure that everything was going according to plan. They were getting closer, and he was getting very uneasy because he said, “Now?” I cut him an annoyed look, “No! Not yet!” He looked at me again, “Has the book nerd gotten here yet? I would really like to avoid becoming a midnight snack!” “Yeah.” I replied. “He just arrived about a minute ago.” I looked back to the dashed-white-line battlefield. It was time. “Now!” I shouted to him.

 

Please let this work. We’re all doomed if this doesn’t.

 

Reviews

[matrixmark]

Anything and I mean anything with the word 'Reaper' in its title will immediately grab my attention.
So this is a really good intro about man vs monster. You built the tension nicely, I felt it could have gone on for longer BUT it was still good all the same and understand that this is just a starter for the main event. (Prologue leading to main story)
It definately has caught my interest as I want to read more about the men coming under attack by the monsters.

Did it work - yes it did.
My only critique is when a new person speaks, start the dialogue off with a new paragraph.

Will I be reading on - I most certainly will. I can see the potential with this story and want to know more.

Mark.

[Tony Jordan]

I'm not overly impressed.
I also agree with Mark re the new paras for new speakers to aid reading.
:)