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Let me lay in dreams
And I want to. I want you to want to.
Carry me in cobwebs
And rescue me from thieves
Lord knows I want to. He wants you to want to.
Surround me in tidal waves,
Cut me into pieces,
Bury me in the haze.
Throw me out when you are done,
But keep me for a while,
Make me believe I've won.
I need you. I want you to need me, too.
Collect the water in your hands,
Blow out smoke in ribbons and bands.
I want you. I need you to want to.

Reviews

[Ella Emergency]

it baffles me. i can't decide what emotions you're trying to convey, which i think has its own lure. very cool

[AJChallenger]

This is a very cute little piece. It flows rather nicely. I really don't have any criticism.

[Lindsay]

I loved this. It's emotional and sensual. I can definitely appreciate this piece. I absolutely loved the last 3 lines. Very poetic and very visual. Great job.

[Katie]

Although it was a little short- the description and thought you put into this piece is evident. I loved it.

[Matt]

this poem may be short but thats what i love about it. it gets the point across beautiful.. and yea i definantly know what your feeling. it sucks but the best thing you can do for yourself is to learn to let go..

[Chelsea.]

I like the connections made in here,
about the ribbons and such.
Vivid picture.
Nice work.

[JuliePetunia]

Great imagery and descriptions!

[Luna]

The want and need of someone else to want is prevalent, the feels and imagery fantastic. Great work.

[biggle]

alright, i read it. lol
its pretty good.

[Lydia]

S**t, this is good.