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Let me lay in dreams
And I want to. I want you to want to.
Carry me in cobwebs
And rescue me from thieves
Lord knows I want to. He wants you to want to.
Surround me in tidal waves,
Cut me into pieces,
Bury me in the haze.
Throw me out when you are done,
But keep me for a while,
Make me believe I've won.
I need you. I want you to need me, too.
Collect the water in your hands,
Blow out smoke in ribbons and bands.
I want you. I need you to want to.

Reviews

[Jennifer.]

Really liked the lines:
"Surround me in tidal waves,
Cut me into pieces,
Bury me in the haze."
The feelings of desperation and obsession come across here, as if you'd do anything to have your feelings reciprocated. Lovely piece, good job.

[Brette Medb]

This is so needy and desperate and the imagery you chose to accompany that message was perfect. Everything fell perfectly into place. It was slow yet rushed and loving but desperate.

[Keli Renee]

This is gorgeous. The flow and the meaning are combined in a very creative and interesting way. I love this, really, I do. Thank you for sending it my way. =)

[kirstey Lost,Crushed,Co..]

i love this :) it's really goood!!

[madimonstermassh]

I liked this. I thought it was confusing, but in a good way, in the sense that it's not obvious what the subject is at first, but its all tied together with a theme, and the reoccurring "I want" lines.
Very enjoyable

[ChristianM]

Very beautiful.
Love is a tricky thing.
I see a lot of the poems on this site regard love.
Well done on this noble effort

[:)]

This reminds me of those thoughts someone has when they really really like someone!!!
Your mind doesn't flow in one distinct thought, it goes everywhere just like hormones...
Well put together for what you were trying to get across.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wow. A sweet and tender flow of words. So many strong statement in this poem. I like it all. Ending was beautiful. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[KIMBERLY]

very nice:)

[lindsay]

This is adorable. Oh I love this so much. It makes me smile.