The Girl Behind The Curtain

The Girl Behind The Curtain
by
Jose M. Euvin

She hides behind that screen
Not wanting to be seen

Her feelings are protected
My heart she has neglected

She's the girl behind the curtain
Scared to be rejected

My heart she holds at hand
Scared to let me in

The girl behind the curtain
My heart she has forsaken

How I've loved the girl behind the curtain
Even though our eyes will never meet
My heart she took from me

Reviews

[Rainbow Rider]

A beautiful, from the heart, write of both self love and pain, precieved happiness and sorrow.

One thing though, the two times you wrote 'Scare' it feels to me you wanted and should have said 'Scared', but forgot the 'd'.

Also in the last set, the word 'love' should be 'loved', if you meant that you have loved her. Otherwise, if you are saying you want to love her, then you would want to change the word 'I've' to 'I'd'. It works both ways, just depends on how you intended it to read.

Thanks for the read request, this was an insightful read. ,,,,Mhk Melvin

Beautifully written though, tender and wrenching at the same time

[ZeeArsonist]

such an unfortunate yet relatable situation. i'd like to hear more about this girl from behind the curtain. such an element of mystery!

[Justine and Sheri]

I think this is an interesting piece. It makes the reader wonder, or at least me, if these two people have ever met or if they just notice one another from a far. It's a good read in my eyes. Keep up the good work.

[TL Boehm]

this is beautiful, sad and lonely writing... well done.

[Blake Q Hatfield]

Nice poem on unrequited love. Sometimes those we want are afraid to want us back.

[Spoken]

A great write about concealed love. Whether it be between two people on the internet, or someone hiding who they are not letting the other inside. emotional piece, well felt

[Michael Lopez]

it works for me.....though you might want to reread....cant say much else after that....
not that the grammers wrong...

[PoemRodent]

A deep sense of imagery with a spice of inner emotional theme. Very well done...

Love and thoughts...

[Natalie C]

You know, I had to read this a couple of times, not because of the lack of understanding this but because I sort off got a feeling that there is something deeper to this than what actually meets the eye.

Ok I get the love from afar theme, but in a strange way I actually get the feeling that you are referring to your actual self, the person inside wanting to be loved and appreciated by the person standing outside.
Does that make sense? (Sorry I get like this at times - he he)

But overall a great piece, you really did manage to portray the sadness and loneness of both persons, inside and out

[Raven Wilson]

I like the style of this poem, concise yet emotional.