She

She

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

I sit there watching her once again

Wondering

Where’s she going?

Where’s she from?

Where did she come from?

Who can she be?

 

I heard her name many times before

But yet

I still don’t know who she is

 

She sits there quietly and often smiles

She looks like she hurts inside

What pain does she hide?

Under those immense eyes

 

Who can she feel for?

Or who has done her wrong

Why if not this man

Than who

 

I sit here and stare once again

Still trying to figure out

Why that sudden smile

Masked with so much pain

 

I dare not ask

For I rather wonder

And sit here as I watch her

Unfold in front of me

 

Her smile says much

Her eyes tell her story

 

Yet her lips never moved!

 

Reviews

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Some suggestions:

I site (sit) there watching her once again

Where she's going?
Where she's from?

"Where's she going?"
"Where's she from?"

the way you wrote it means 'where she is going' 'where she is from' which isn't really a question... more like a statement.

I head (heard) her name many times before
But yet
I still don't know who she's is (she is)... the apostrophe 's' reads as "she is is"

That said....

I dare not ask
For I rather wonder
And sit here as I watch her
Unfold in front of me

Her smile says much
Her eyes tell her story

Yet her lips never moved!

I love these lines. the image of her "unfolding in front of you" very nice. Just so you know I only point out these grammar mishaps to help, but it doesn't take away from the poem, for me, at all. I often have reviews of people telling me how I misspelled this, that, or the other... and I'm grateful, so don't take it negatively I really enjoy your work!

[['tatiz speis]]

I'd have to say the story you told of this girl is a story I've heard before, but never get tired of. You put a spin on it though, converting it into a poem.

[James Mayfield]

I've felt these very emotions a number of times and recognize the pain in your words. It's hard to see the truth behind the smile sometimes.

[Ladysue]

Yes, the eyes can be very revealing. Truth be told in the eyes. A very unique write and I liked it a lot. Nice job!!

[Raven Wilson]

I really like this, it speaks strongly. I do believe the eyes tell more truth than the person admits and it makes me smile to see that some people care enough to notice.

[Touché Armada]

Who, the ambiguous people the avatars and pictures the ones who reveal their dreams and nightmares, the ones that sometimes you just want to touch their hand and see their eyes glisten for real.. Those ones that you cant help but feel some level of affection for, and wonder I wonder who they really are without the mask of their words and the shelter of a screen that seems to substitute the sun. As there is no way of knowing, we just watch and ponder, who are they =)

[Bittercream]

This is mysterious, are you talking to a photograph or a mannequin or a real person?
Many questions and that's what it makes so damn interesting!
I love it!
BTW ... I won't tell you about the spelling mistakes, others did this before.

[Roach]

This is beautiful. I've always heard eyes are the doorway to a soul. I love the mystery in your poems.

[Nick Erickson]

Very good flow and imagery. Reminds me of "people watching". I do it all the time as I travel so much. I just sit and look, wondering who they are, where they're going, why, etc...
Good job.

[Tessa Anne]

I think your poetry is absolutly amazing. keep going. i loved it