Free Fall

Free Fall

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

I’m screaming my heart out

Yet you can’t see

I’m dying without you

Please come back to me

 

All the time that I lost

How long will it last

Before it gets worse

Reminiscing the past

 

As time goes on

I start to look back

It’s time to move on

And get back on track

 

I lost all desires

But whose there to blame

The mirror don’t lie

It reflects all my shame!

 

Desires are lost

Decisions are not

Freedom is granted

And lost in a flash

 

Suicidal tendencies

Disturbing my life

Before me is a cliff

Should I take the dive?

 

I take one last breath

And make my decision

Here comes the fall

The end of my mission!

 

Reviews

[*** Hey Jude***]

The pain of losing a loved one can be paralizing. I like the way you have expressed these intense emotions in poem! ~ N

[melissa]

I have not lost my love one yet but I did lose some one who was like my best friend she is my sister Shannon she died back in 95 and I miss her very much thank you for sharing its a wonderful poem

[Stella]

not bad. I have to say I really liked it. it's great:) lol.

[Shelly Wiseberg]

The feelings of loss, sadness, pain and desperation of a broken heart and endings of relationships, feeling like its the end of the world, honest and truthful write raw in its emotions. I like deep writers like you, Shelly

[Aeman]

the rhyming and and layout....they reflect what you feel, in fact the whole poem seems to be coming out from your soul, not just something from ur brain which i really like....

Amazing work...

[Alex Glasser]

I really love this poem. Makes my spine shiver just by reading it. (In a good way, mind you.)

Great work, here.

[pal]

"Suicidal tendencies;Disturbing my life;Before me is a cliff;Should I take the dive?
I take one last breath;And make my decision;Here comes the fall;The end of my mission!"

OOps this is real bad one.. why end mission for love??
pal

[Lady Luck]

I think I love this poem. It's really good and filled with emotion. I really like how from time to time it seems to randomly rhyme, but it's still good. At least it works in a pattern of sorts. You do a good job at using your words and all of that to show what's really going on. But someone might read it and think that something's wrong with you. So, take care.
LL

[Nan]

Losing a lover is a drag and you describe it well here. Life does become tasteless
and dry, but it doesn't go on forever. When I get to the end of my rope,
I let go and apparently, you do the same.

take it easy,

Nan

[Brianna Brie]

Whew, I am just full of tears today. Not a good day to do reviews. Color me black with this one. Good stuff.

[Natalie C]

Another heartbreaking piece, filled with intense and raw emotion. I know I said it before but I really hope that getting these feelings out on paper is helping you cope with what is troubling your mind.
I almost feel guilty in saying that I enjoyed reading this.