Our Oath

Our Oath

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

Once again

Why?

I guess I’ll always live the moment. 

I created this, and I’m the only one who could put a stop to it.

Me

The destroyer of many

Redeemer of none

I’m force to live with this curse, the moment never fades.

I’m meant to relive it over and over again.

 

I can say we are happy even though we not together.

We were never meant to be, we love to torture each other.

What is it that we want; with every opportunity at hand we chose the worse.

As much as I say it won’t happen again, I can’t take control.

 

There’s that shadow that follows me, in it lives her.

In her I live, yet in reality we’re both dead.

Dead to the world and those who care,

 Those who tried to care for us

We are the torn in the rose, which protects all beauty.

Keeping it far out of reach

Untouchable to those who come near

Never letting our guard down for one second, cause we fear the worse.

So we continue to hurt one another just to be able to feel alive.

Loving each other yet having to be apart.

That’s the rules we live by,

Our unspoken oath, and oath of silence and pain,

Which we’ve learn to accept.

 

Reviews

[T. L. O'Neal]

I enjoyed this and it made a lot of sense. Some relationships are just not meant to be. T

[Ashes]

This is kind of sad, but really meaningful about the type of relationship (on sided as it may be) people often go through. The flow is very nice, and I love how you had some of the lines flow in to the ones right after them instead of just changing focusing like is normally done in modern poetry.

[Nick Erickson]

Very well written, full of emotion and pain.
You captured your feelings well in this piece.

[Ladysue]

When you want something to be right and even though you know it isn't, it can propel you to stay in a bad relationship and ultimately this is what happens as you so elequently put it "our unspoken oath, and oath of silence and pain, Which we learned to accept." It isn't worth it. It becomes time wasted from finding what you really want. A very passionate and poignant write, my friend.

[Jess: ~The Sidekick~]

Very powerful.
Good piece. =)

[skittles]

wow that was powerful i liked it it had some true mening

[Blackbird Cry]

I feel it... which makes me love it and hate it all in the same breath.

[Tarah]

Very good. I can relate, there are sometimes certain people who you know will never be able to be with you because you just dont work. Passion in the greatest sense. A true love hate relationship. I like the frankness and the blunt to the point lines. Two thumbs up.

[Tessa Anne]

It's like you were trying to say that you loved to hate each other. it was really intense, it was dark, yet passionate. to alot of people this could mean nothing. but to people who know what your talking about, this makes a whole lot of sense. so congradulations because this makes a lot of sence to me. lol. I really love your writing. you have no idea like, i can feel what your going through sometimes, and other times i dont think i could even imagine what that pain feels like.

[BrightEyes]

sometimes two people are not meant to be together....staying together while you just keep hurting each other doesn't help anyone..the pain that the idea of leaving brings comes across here....yet the pain of staying seems stronger. nice write.

laura

[Cataline]

The idea behind this poem was very well thought out. Though some parts were a bit cofusing (due to word choice/grammar) I really liked how you described what seemed like a vicious cycle between trying to keep the relationship together but continued to hurt each other despite your best efforts, "So we continue to hurt one another just to be able to feel alive./Loving each other, living miles apart."
(However, I may be completely missing the point of your poem, so please excuse me if I am)

Cataline =(^;^)=
Happy writing!