Our Oath

Our Oath

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

Once again

Why?

I guess I’ll always live the moment. 

I created this, and I’m the only one who could put a stop to it.

Me

The destroyer of many

Redeemer of none

I’m force to live with this curse, the moment never fades.

I’m meant to relive it over and over again.

 

I can say we are happy even though we not together.

We were never meant to be, we love to torture each other.

What is it that we want; with every opportunity at hand we chose the worse.

As much as I say it won’t happen again, I can’t take control.

 

There’s that shadow that follows me, in it lives her.

In her I live, yet in reality we’re both dead.

Dead to the world and those who care,

 Those who tried to care for us

We are the torn in the rose, which protects all beauty.

Keeping it far out of reach

Untouchable to those who come near

Never letting our guard down for one second, cause we fear the worse.

So we continue to hurt one another just to be able to feel alive.

Loving each other yet having to be apart.

That’s the rules we live by,

Our unspoken oath, and oath of silence and pain,

Which we’ve learn to accept.

 

Reviews

[T. L. O'Neal]

I enjoyed this and it made a lot of sense. Some relationships are just not meant to be. T

[Yoko]

I always envy those who can write free verse. I liked this one, it made me stop and think. One of the factors that decides whether or not I like a poem. The other factor was fulfilled as well, the emotion in this piece. It reached out to me and grabbed hold, keeping my attention here. Nice going!

[James Mayfield]

There were a few grammatical errors throughout the piece. Aside from that it was a good read. It's always hard to make it past a fallen relationship. Good luck and thank you for sharing.

[Sassafrass]

I found this piece very emotive. Many people fall into the horror of a destructive relationship and can't seem to find their way out again. I like that the writer is aware that the relationship is an unhealthy one and questions it, even if they can't turn away from it. It is often easier to accept painful things if we can understand them.
I particularly liked the line "So we continue to hurt one another just to be able to feel alive." Strange, isn't it, that pain seems to be one of the most life affirming emotions we have.
I found a few grammatical errors, but nothing too detrimental. Keep up the good work.

[Dead Angel]

very powerful words were put together in this poem. a few spelling errors but other than that very powerful and truthful. nicely done! :)

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

another sad piece of writing -- but it is so beautiful -- nicely done

[Carole]

This is such a sad write. This reminds me of two individuals that have been deeply hurt, because as always, "Hurt people, hurt people." Nothing will change in the pattern written about here until something is done to break it, and something CAN be done. I would tell these that you wrote about, to seek out counseling. Relationships are pure hell if there is a lot of pain carried into them. It's like taking a lot of baggage into the relationship. It is cumbersome and continually gets in the way. I wish you and whoever you write about, well. There IS hope. There is ALWAYS help, but sometimes you must seek it out. Blessings, Carole

[Mary E. Green]

nicely written.

[TL Boehm]

eloquent writing. So much said in this piece - about destructive relationships. How compelling, consuming and ultimately obliterating they can become. And we simply cannot walk away from the pull of another soul at times. Whether we want to admit it - this poem to me is resonant - because we probably all have someone like this - and we feel that pull - maybe not constantly - but its always there.
Awesome poetry.

[Gandré]

:)

[desertraven]

"In her I live, yet in reality, we're both dead..."
"Dead to the world and those who care, those who tried to care for us..."
These lines bring to mind a relationship disaster my oldest daughter is currently living in. Pointed and truthful. Good write.
Sandra♥