Our Oath

Our Oath

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

Once again

Why?

I guess I’ll always live the moment. 

I created this, and I’m the only one who could put a stop to it.

Me

The destroyer of many

Redeemer of none

I’m force to live with this curse, the moment never fades.

I’m meant to relive it over and over again.

 

I can say we are happy even though we not together.

We were never meant to be, we love to torture each other.

What is it that we want; with every opportunity at hand we chose the worse.

As much as I say it won’t happen again, I can’t take control.

 

There’s that shadow that follows me, in it lives her.

In her I live, yet in reality we’re both dead.

Dead to the world and those who care,

 Those who tried to care for us

We are the torn in the rose, which protects all beauty.

Keeping it far out of reach

Untouchable to those who come near

Never letting our guard down for one second, cause we fear the worse.

So we continue to hurt one another just to be able to feel alive.

Loving each other yet having to be apart.

That’s the rules we live by,

Our unspoken oath, and oath of silence and pain,

Which we’ve learn to accept.

 

Reviews

[T. L. O'Neal]

I enjoyed this and it made a lot of sense. Some relationships are just not meant to be. T

[Elise O'Haire]

(gasp!) Very powerful. I didn't understand it totally until the end, and I really like that about it! I don't really know what else to say. Wow!

Elise O.

[Elise O'Haire]

(gasp!) Very powerful. I didn't understand it totally until the end, and I really like that about it! I don't really know what else to say. Wow!

Elise O.

[Lionel Braud]

This speaks really well as a dramatic monologue, because I CAN HEAR THE PERSON SPEAKING TO NOT ONLY THE listener but a wide audience< i can see this in a play>

[Tempest]

vividly honest. This reads like confession meets internal thought brought to life in the hands of an artist. Very well done.

[James K. Blaylock]

Wow, this is such a powerful read. It fills your heart with wonder, then within mere seconds it knocks the very breath from your body. I truly loved reading it.

[Natalie C]

Wow this was such a 'in your face' almost suffocating piece. I am sorry, for a moment I am left in a total state of awe, staring at your words - powerful!
I've never had a hard time reviewing something before, but I think this one hit too close to home. That is what made it such a brilliant piece. Putting a part of yourself out there, with no limitation to what your soul is feeling at that moment. I loved the ironic contradiction of emotions, seemed to bring forth the emotional battle, which taunts your lives.

So we continue to hurt one another just to be able to feel alive.
Loving each other, living miles apart.
That's the rules we live by,
Our unspoken oath, an oath of silence and pain,
Which we learned to accept.

Brilliant piece, definitely going to my list of favs!

[Anne Martin]

There is a lot to commend in this, but there are places where grammar and typos let you down.

"The destroyer of many[,] redeemer of none." That really screams for a comma in the middle.

"I'm force[d] to live with this curse, the moment never fades." "D" missing, and it is really two sentences. You do that often, sometimes combining a question and a sentence, and that doesn't really work for me.

"What is it that we want, with every opportunity at hand we chose the worse." It should be "worst."

"That's the rules we live by," It should be "Those are..." or "That's the rule..."

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is a passionate and soul wrenching piece for me to read It sounds like our marriage and subsequent
divorce. We are soul mate and learning to live without each other has not been easy but we have managed. We are both better people for it. This is expressive and emotional piece. Well written and moving.
Debby

[Spoken]

Our unspoken oath, and (maybe a or an) oath of silence and pain

There's that shadow that follows me, in it lives her.

In her I live, yet in reality we're both dead.

Great lines. This peice makes me think of accepting defeat, in a way. Like it's too late to go back and fix the wrongs but you care too much to let go. A biter sweet write. Well done!

[Michael]

"The destroyer of many redeemer of none."

"There's that shadow that follows me, in it lives her.
In her I live, yet in reality we're both dead."

these lines really inspired me! your work is great here i caught what you casted out and you hooked me with your emotions.