If You Ever

If You Ever

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

If you ever see me cry

Is not because I miss you

Is because I hurt

With you I learn

The meaning of heartbreak!

 

My heart was never broken

But now is torn apart

My eyes were never open

But now I see the dark

 

There's no light in darkness

There's no season rain

There's no close in open

From the wombs of pain

 

Grant me one last chance

To fix all that’s gone wrong

One last chance for some romance

Because here’s where you belong

 

My tears have run dry

But the pain still remains

I have my reasons why

To you my heart pertains

 

I ask a million times

Why I feel this pain

To you I always write

Yet my heart is whom I blame

 

It’s time to start a new page

And leave it all behind

Now that I learned of pain

And how it feels inside

 

I chose to forget

But my heart still remembers

Can there be room for change

After all I’ve surrender

 

Here’s one more letter

That you’ll never get to read

I’ll burn it in December

And start new in spring

 

From fire to dust

All that's left are ashes

From my previous love

A kiss is all I’m asking

 

Fare well my good lady

I’ll try not to look back

I’ll take everything you thought me

And keep it all inside

 

Pain’s a lesson to be learned

That should never be taught

The heart’s like a precious gem

It should only be loved

 

Reviews

[Spoken]

Yet my heart it's whom I blame

maybe..."yet my heart is whom I blame"

I'll tried not to look back

maybe... "I'll try not to look back"'
All it's left are ashes
maybe "all that remains are ashes" or "all that's left are ashes".

Pain's a lesson to be learn
That should never be thought
The heart's a precious gem
It should only be love

"Pain's a lesson to be learned
that should never be taught
The heart's a precious gem
It should only be loved"

just some suggestions.. that being said...


I chose to forget
But my heart still remembers
Can there be room for change
After all I've surrender

great stanza here. I love the tone, a great feel of pain with a hint of healing. This has real potential. Well done!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A powerful and heartfelt plea to that one you love... very well structured with great flow... I don't know how someone could resist such beautiful words.

[Helen Woodward]

Nice work, though sad. You do move forward in this piece and at the end of your journey you are trying to take what you learned and throw away what you don't need...good work. There are a few typos you need to fix, but they are minor.
Helen :)

[Yvonne Heidt]

My eyes were never open
But now I see the dark...

Pain's a lesson to be learned
That should never be thaught
The heart's a precious gem
It should only be loved..

These are brilliant lines. I loved the whole thing. Excellent job.

[Crystal]

The pain that you are trying to convey is great, but with any heart-break there is almost to much to bear. This is a good write.

[~ Tex]

Your poignant poetry paints painful pictures of your passionate heart and heartbreak... of lifeless love and loveless life... and out of it all, the Phoenix rises again... and again... and again. Very well portrayed!

[jmt8921]

I always find it hard to review poetry instead of regular prose. It seems like poems are more about the emotion than the presentation. What's there to say? I've felt what the speaker feels, and I appreciate the words, even if I don't have much else to say.

[kristyn=]]

Don't give up on love... when people break your heart it takes awhile to put the pieces back together... but when you do it all seem so become alittle better. And for the ones that have broken your heart i feel sorry for them because the were dumb enought to let you go.

[Queen of the Damned]

I think is has a good rhythm to it. Your words describe pain and heart break so vividly. Great job. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Heidi]

the two poems ive read so far reflect the same thing.....did you just get dumped? if so im sorry

[Gandré]

sweet idealism !