If You Ever

If You Ever

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

If you ever see me cry

Is not because I miss you

Is because I hurt

With you I learn

The meaning of heartbreak!

 

My heart was never broken

But now is torn apart

My eyes were never open

But now I see the dark

 

There's no light in darkness

There's no season rain

There's no close in open

From the wombs of pain

 

Grant me one last chance

To fix all that’s gone wrong

One last chance for some romance

Because here’s where you belong

 

My tears have run dry

But the pain still remains

I have my reasons why

To you my heart pertains

 

I ask a million times

Why I feel this pain

To you I always write

Yet my heart is whom I blame

 

It’s time to start a new page

And leave it all behind

Now that I learned of pain

And how it feels inside

 

I chose to forget

But my heart still remembers

Can there be room for change

After all I’ve surrender

 

Here’s one more letter

That you’ll never get to read

I’ll burn it in December

And start new in spring

 

From fire to dust

All that's left are ashes

From my previous love

A kiss is all I’m asking

 

Fare well my good lady

I’ll try not to look back

I’ll take everything you thought me

And keep it all inside

 

Pain’s a lesson to be learned

That should never be taught

The heart’s like a precious gem

It should only be loved

 

Reviews

[Spoken]

Yet my heart it's whom I blame

maybe..."yet my heart is whom I blame"

I'll tried not to look back

maybe... "I'll try not to look back"'
All it's left are ashes
maybe "all that remains are ashes" or "all that's left are ashes".

Pain's a lesson to be learn
That should never be thought
The heart's a precious gem
It should only be love

"Pain's a lesson to be learned
that should never be taught
The heart's a precious gem
It should only be loved"

just some suggestions.. that being said...


I chose to forget
But my heart still remembers
Can there be room for change
After all I've surrender

great stanza here. I love the tone, a great feel of pain with a hint of healing. This has real potential. Well done!

[melissa]

This is a sad poem but I love it very much keep up the good work

[PoemRodent]

Overall a good read, keep up the good work and feel free to send me a request when ever..

Love and Thoughts,

Dostani

[pal]

"My heart was never broken
But now is torn apart
My eyes were never open
But now I see the dark"

very true

Pain's a lesson to be learned
That should never be thaught
The heart's a precious gem
It should only be loved

this is ideal

great poem

[Natalie C]

I chose to forget
But my heart still remembers
Can there be room for change
After all I've surrender

I surrendered, no wait, gave up a long time ago! Brilliant piece my friend, a perfect piece to match my mood today. I loved how this piece flowed and how you managed to put your heart on this screen, for all to see!

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A sad, sad poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Eyeliner W***e]

Wow, this is so good, it is so sad! I'm so sorry that you have to go through something like this, It's a hard thing to have happen to you. This poem was amazing, it was so good. Sad through, i hope you are better now! Pain is a leason to learn, a very hard lesson but you have to go through it in life. Very goof job!

[El-Enano]

Pain's a lesson to be learned

That should never be thaught

The heart's a precious gem

It should only be loved

Love this part.

[Elise O'Haire]

This paints a very good, but sad picture. I like the emotion in it. The only thing I did notice was how the beginning rhymed but the end didn't. I think it would be nice if it all was the same, but I know how hard that is!! Sometimes you have an idea and you just can't get a certain part to fit right. Otherwise, I think it's great!

Elise O'Haire

[Chloe Smith]

You have so many poems that portray your broken heart. You convey much emotion well and I enjoy your work. I hope things get better for you soon!

[Mary E. Green]

Ok people have already pointed out the typos so I'm just gonna say I loved this poem. You did a great job of making the reader feel with you. Wonderful job.