Good Enough

Good Enough

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

 

I’m never gonna be good enough for you

The pain you left

You can’t undo

Even though it hurts inside

You will never see me cry

 

Perfections not for me!

Was it so hard for you to see?

Like a soldier I stand tall

Even though my heart you’ve torn

 

My skies have darken

The rain pores down

My soul is broken

The pain resides

 

I can’t see the light ahead

And

Still you don’t understand

 

My hearts in pieces

You should’ve said no

It was all a game

You never loved

 

You could had stopped the pain

Now life will never be the same

 

“I never really loved you”

Was the last I ever heard!

All I wanted was to hold you

Yet my love you pushed away

 

 

Reviews

[Brette Medb]

The rhyme started out strong only to taper off and then suddenly become sporadic or vacant... the overall writing was good but if you choose to begin with rhyme it should stay that way... that's just my opinion but enough about that. The poem was pretty good.


Brette

[TL Boehm]

rejection is often hellish and this poem attests to that - when all we want is the very thing we cannot have. Well written.

[Sara Muschweck]

Such heart break, wonderful eloquence. Your pain and strength shine well in this.

[desertraven]

love bites! Though not my favorite type of person, game players in the game of love are meant to teach us something about our selves. Painful and heartwrenching, but we are meant to survive to tell the tale. You have done it well.
Sandra♥

[Bittercream]

This is bitter, is sad, is angry. This is very good!

[kristyn=]]

good makes me think of how much pain you went through during this time..

[Tempest]

I am always a fan of your writing. This piece is no exception. I love how you convey emotions so well. Keep writing so I can keep reading.

[Blue Bard]

A tangled web, this love stuff. It courses through us like molten lava. Pain and heat, light and dark. Such rich territory to mine right inside our own heads and hearts. Keep writing. Look forward to reading more.

[Michael]

emotional draught...very well penned out here...you have so much pain but do not want it to be seen...love is powerful...very well personalized by your words...crazy what it can do to people...light to dark...clear to rain...whole to torn...i mean love is the most powerful gift on earth...very good reminder of this.. sorry for your loss

[Jenny Davis]

This is such a touching piece...it's so sad what one's love or lack thereof can do. You have expressed it all beautifully :)

[An Ever Ending Story]

Nice. More personal and emotional than the other. The use of rhyme and other poetic techniques is used sparingly, with none of them taking over the poem, thus making the moments in which they do appear more visible.

The emotion and openness of the work really shows, giving it a raw, vulnerable feeling. The personal feelings are easy to see, yet, you were able to keep it from being to narrow and specific, through ambiguous details and metaphors. It is fairly easy to relate to, as it displays very broad concepts, and can be interpreted in a variety of ways befitting the specific reader.

It fluctuates sporadically between smooth and difficult to follow. The end in particular is where it loses some of its strength, but it is not completely lost, and it moves fairly well through the entirety

Altogether, fairly good. The actual writing and word-work is the primary note of merit, as, mainly due to the sometimes bad poetic flow, it was a bit of a chore to read. Not the best piece of poeticism I have seen here, but I can still sat that is very far from the worst

You are a fairly good writer. Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading your other works, and hopefully seeing an improvement. You have potential. It will be nice to see you make full use of that. As I said, you are a good writer, but everyone has the potential to be better, and that is definitely visible in yours.

It seems you tend to lose head about half way through, shifting from good to off at random intervals. Get a hold on that, and you can go from good to great.