Longing To

Longing To

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

I'm screaming my heart out

Yet you can't see

 

The pain that you left

Lives deep inside me

 

I drown all my sorrows

Inside a bottle

 

Don't care what life

Brings me tomorrow

 

If life's a sweet melody

Mine has gone bitter

 

I'm longing to see you

Attend to your Ritter

 

At night I search for you

With my shining armor

 

Enchanted I'll wait

Defending your honor

 

In part I'm tormented

By the pain I inflict

 

My futures demented

And hard to predict

 

The spell has been cast

Which only you are to break

 

My love's everlasting

For no one can take!

 

 

Reviews

[T. L. O'Neal]

A love gone bad is a painful malady but you expressed it well. Good read. T

[melissa]

I know you feel I used to stay in my room all the time when I was younger because I kept getting hurt by guys all the time because they kept cheating on me than one day I met the love of my life

[Jennifer]

Well done!

[Adam Greenfield]

Plainly and powerfully put. Great write. And thanks for letting me know what a Ritter is. Learn a new thing everyday, hunh?

[Lady Luck]

It's really well written and all of that. Good choice on words and it's great that you're really looking out of the box to make it sound right. Thanks for the definition.
LL

[pal]

"I'm screaming my heart out
Yet you can't see

The pain that you left
Lives deep inside me"

simply expressed, direct touch the heart.

lovely poem
pal

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Sometimes it hurts but we must move on. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[El-Enano]

Thanks for the definition.

[Eyeliner W***e]

This is really good! I love the idea for it, and the way you used the word. The words are sharp, clear, and deep, but still very good. I love the way you wrote it, very good job!

[Helen Woodward]

That was going to be my first question! A knight, I should have made the connection to shining armor, but hey no one's perfect. You are such a sad person, your poetry reflects such sadness and bitterness. It's always dark and depressing, but if it makes you feel better to write it down then that's a good thing.
Helen :)

[*~* Anna Marie *~*]

hey this is really good...its deep..which makes it good =]