I Tried

I Tried

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

As far as I’m concerned

I tried

 

I did all a man could do

To never stop loving you

 

You are marry

But still alone

I hear you cry

Cause I’m not home

 

Where is home

Sometimes I think

Home is where your family is

Others say

Home is where your heart is

 

My heart is split

And

Yet broken

 

Can a man have more than one heart?

Can a man have more than one home?

 

When I walk the streets

I examine the smallest things

People

Details

Those that remind me of you

 

The question that still hunts me is…

Who are you?

The question still remains

 

You are the one I dreamed of

Once upon a time

Somewhere in a dream I dreamt

 

Can’t put a name to that smile

Or a face in denial

 

Just take it all

Make it go away

From the beginning

To its end

 

 

Reviews

[Mary E. Green]

This one is wonderful. It is straight to the point. I can sympathize with it... being torn between people and emotions. Wonderful write.

[Sassafrass]

So far this is my favorite of your writings that I have read. The message is very clear as well as there being strong emotion.

In the first line of the third stanza do you mean 'marry' as in to be married, or do you mean 'merry' as in to be happy? That was the only thing I was confused about.

I loved the end. I've often wished that someone would "take it all...from the beginning to its end"

[Crystal]

In this it almost seems like you are torn by two people and you are trying to come to a conclusion of what to do. THis is a great write and the emotions you portray are good.

[James K. Blaylock]

The awful pain of being lovesick. Great write.

[Eyeliner W***e]

I hate the emptiness love leaves you!
This is written very good!

[Jenny Davis]

Very interesting. It is a shame when we are torn between two emotions. Nicely written :)

[Blackbird Cry]

I hate the emptiness after love leaves. You captured it well here.

[Sara Muschweck]

You were able to take the hurt and pain of a breakup and create a wonderful work of art. Well done.

[PoemRodent]

Great flow and tapestry in writing. Feelings are well projected in this write. Great work.

Dostani

[Kelly D. Burris]

Nice piece. Really feel the wanting and dispair in this. Draws the reader in.
Nice work!
Kelly