I Tried

I Tried

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

As far as I’m concerned

I tried

 

I did all a man could do

To never stop loving you

 

You are marry

But still alone

I hear you cry

Cause I’m not home

 

Where is home

Sometimes I think

Home is where your family is

Others say

Home is where your heart is

 

My heart is split

And

Yet broken

 

Can a man have more than one heart?

Can a man have more than one home?

 

When I walk the streets

I examine the smallest things

People

Details

Those that remind me of you

 

The question that still hunts me is…

Who are you?

The question still remains

 

You are the one I dreamed of

Once upon a time

Somewhere in a dream I dreamt

 

Can’t put a name to that smile

Or a face in denial

 

Just take it all

Make it go away

From the beginning

To its end

 

 

Reviews

[Angelheaded Hipster]

You are marry (merry?)(married?)

But still alone


These are feelings that are too universal anymore, and it seems like people keep wrapped up in their own selfish lives, that yes...even though she is married, or whatever, she can still feel the lonliness of not being noticed.

Those questions of yours...good luck on finding the answers....I dont think it's ever been answered, but the human heart, and the mind, and all they do....they're still being researched by the poets and doctors alike.

You capture lonliness and heartbreak well.

[H. A. M.]

You portray the frustrated lover well in this. I'm feeling the pain in this of not being with his chosen one.

"I did all a man could do
To never stop loving you"
Like the love was being driven out of him for this person and he was doing his best to keep it.

When I walk the streets
I examine the smallest details
People
Things
Those that remind me of you
This is a hard emotion to just turn off.
Nicely put.

[TamiViolet]

You bring to mind a good question, my friend, 'Can a man have more than one home? Can a man have more than one heart?' I believe we can, but ultimately, a choice must be made so as not to suffer loss of both. Intriguing piece.

[Stacy A. Foster]

I enjoyed this. I would suggest removing the first two lines to create more of an impact with the reader. We should be able to pull that out of the emotion of the piece itself and your title drives it home.

I did all a man could do
To never stop loving you

Those two lines are very strong and would pack a nice punch to start. Your heart splits and it breaks...

Good emotion in this,
Stacy :)

[Natalie C]

Hmm this was such a wonderful bitter sweet piece, filled with a contrast of feelings. On the one hand a love that you will never forget and yet on the other, a part of you, you would rather just erase. Great writing, I can see the transformation in your works, you seem to grow with this art and I am really loving all the different aspects of your writing.

Great piece, I really enjoyed it!

[skittles]

this sounds like true love a love that can not be shared with just any one but a true love and that special person u should not let go

[Spoken]

It may feel sometimes by the breaking of your heart that you have lost "the one", but if you both were truly meant to be, you would be. That only means your true love awaits.. seeking, as you do, for the one who makes her heart complete. There is someone out there dreaming of you, even though she doesn't know who you are yet...

A biter sweet write. Thank you, always a pleasure reading your passion through your work.

[James Mayfield]

You'll tear yourself apart trying to understand some of these questions. I hope your writing is helping you heal. Thank you for sharing.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

sad, sweet, romantic, heart breaking -- so many things i feel frm reading this -- great write

[Ladysue]

A good piece and it is very hard struggling between emotions. I can relate to this one. Great piece.