In Silence

In Silence

by

Jose M. Euvin

 

 

Sleeping in silence

Screaming inside

 

Wish you could hear me

So

I can open my eyes

 

The cups are filled

With tears I shed

 

Scream of depression

While lying in bed

 

The night is immense

And

Sour are the tears

 

The silence amends

The worst of my fears

 

Can one really live

When life is a dream

 

Can I really expect

For you to hear my screams

 

The heart's really silent

When there's nothing left

 

It's hard to feel anything

With the calling of death

 

Reviews

[Querida]

The sheer emotion in this piece is what strikes me as the most inviting. You can nearly feel and hear this girl as she screams for release. Your flow is amazing, if a teensy bilt stilted. Personally, I believe this enhances the read. How can one create amazing, smooth rhythms when life itself does not work that way?

I truly found beauty in this pice of art.

[skittles]

nice its got some good deep meaning its very good

[TL Boehm]

this one made me shudder. It is such profound writing wrapped up in a paucity of words. Well done.

[Morgan N. aka Mi]

I love this. I have written many poems about silence and the madness it induces. This is a stunning portrayal of those feelings.

[Tenten]

a great flow to this poem, its awkwardly comforting.

[R J Askew]

I really like the line 'The night is immense'. And of course that is often the worst of times for anyone in bad shape, in body or soul. Great read, captures the agonies. And that line i love.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very well expressed poem. Thanks for sharing. Debileah

[Heidi]

powerful. i like how you write, nothing is left without meaning to it

[Tempest]

wonderful couplet. Nicely expressed with perfectly rhyming lines. This poem is absolutely packed with emotion. A powerful punch of empathy for the poetic voice - amazingly written.

[Laura Sparkle]

"The heart's really silent
When there's nothing left
It's hard to feel anything
With the calling of death"

Wow! such familiar thoughts. :P Great job!

[Kelly D. Burris]

You did a great job expressing such depths of depression, hope you see the light at the end of that tunnel...
Kelly