In Silence

In Silence

by

Jose M. Euvin

 

 

Sleeping in silence

Screaming inside

 

Wish you could hear me

So

I can open my eyes

 

The cups are filled

With tears I shed

 

Scream of depression

While lying in bed

 

The night is immense

And

Sour are the tears

 

The silence amends

The worst of my fears

 

Can one really live

When life is a dream

 

Can I really expect

For you to hear my screams

 

The heart's really silent

When there's nothing left

 

It's hard to feel anything

With the calling of death

 

Reviews

[Querida]

The sheer emotion in this piece is what strikes me as the most inviting. You can nearly feel and hear this girl as she screams for release. Your flow is amazing, if a teensy bilt stilted. Personally, I believe this enhances the read. How can one create amazing, smooth rhythms when life itself does not work that way?

I truly found beauty in this pice of art.

[rumpulpulsky]

I loved how it started and but I find the rest hard to follow:

The silence amends
The worse of my fears

This seems to me like the beginning of the realisation that nothing is left. Realising this

Can I really expect
For you to hear my screams

should be read as a relief or realisation rather than a cry of depression.
But then, if nothing is left, how can death be calling?

[Bearcub The First]

It is wonderfull i love the contrast. it is a great poem

[Alex Glasser]

You truly are an amazing poet. I think you should read in class, and learned about. You're truly amazing! I'm bringing this poem in tomorrow to my literature class.

You're truly amazing at poetry.

[angelina neves]

~ "Can one really live/ When life is a dream" ~ and siting here i was asking myself: isn't what we call "life" just a dream? What is "reality" but the feelings he have?
very beautiful poem...

[Nick Erickson]

Very deep and dark. The depression so descriptive. I like your use of "sour" when describing tears.
Well done.

[Chloe Smith]

I felt pain whilst reading this, therefore it is well written, nice one mate!

[Crystal]

This is a good write. I can "feel" the pain.

[Queen of the Damned]

It sounds to me that this is written about a darker time in life. Emotions can be overwhelming and this writing shows that. I think you did an amazing job.

[Jess: ~The Sidekick~]

Wonderfully written. Very powerful.

[Gordon Greene]

I know what you mean... played possum a lot as a kid. Mostly just to hide the pain...

Seriously, emotional piece with some vivid pictures of hopelessness. I think we've all been there at one time or another.

Gordon