In Silence

In Silence

by

Jose M. Euvin

 

 

Sleeping in silence

Screaming inside

 

Wish you could hear me

So

I can open my eyes

 

The cups are filled

With tears I shed

 

Scream of depression

While lying in bed

 

The night is immense

And

Sour are the tears

 

The silence amends

The worst of my fears

 

Can one really live

When life is a dream

 

Can I really expect

For you to hear my screams

 

The heart's really silent

When there's nothing left

 

It's hard to feel anything

With the calling of death

 

Reviews

[Querida]

The sheer emotion in this piece is what strikes me as the most inviting. You can nearly feel and hear this girl as she screams for release. Your flow is amazing, if a teensy bilt stilted. Personally, I believe this enhances the read. How can one create amazing, smooth rhythms when life itself does not work that way?

I truly found beauty in this pice of art.

[Barbara Walker]

This speaks to me of depression and how being heard by others would help one to heal. Depression puts many people in bed where they cry many tears. The heart can feel so dead and silent and feel there is nothing left to care about, nothing to feel. Great write! Barbara

[imm's place]

powerful sad poem hopefully only muse. feelings so strong, sad, and lonely. excellently expressed, mary

[Helena]

"Sleeping in silence/ Screaming inside/Wish you could hear me/So I can open my eyes"

I heard you, loud and clear. This was very well penned Jose. You have described your pain
very eloquently, from your thoughts, to the pen onto the page. Well done!

[Chillbear Latrigue]

This a great big deep dark poem that you produced here. Very emotional and stirring. Impressive work, my friend.

[Stella]

umm.. i have to say.. i loved it. It made me feel something new.. something i've never felt before. I don't really no what the feeling is but... i kind of liked it but it scared me at the same time. So.. pretty much what i'm saying here is... i loved it.

[LiteSkinned Dude]

This brought tears and chills...you can feel the pain in the words - partly because I feel like this right now for other reasons - but I appreciate your work..and I'll be the first to say "Thank you..."

[Roy Hudson]

Nice use of metaphor. I read a lot of poetry describing depression, and usually it's not my thing, but this one really grabbed me. One thing, though... in the next-to-last stanza, I think you mean "there's" instead of "theirs." I could be wrong though, given the context.
Keep up the good work. =)

[lori c]

,,,the night is immense,,, and long and lonely and silent when going through whatever makes our hearts silently sob. the imagery here is intense and so personal. well done.

[Rain]

I think it's great you use writing to release the fears and doubts we all have. This was a good piece of creative writing. Rain..

[Little Mouse]

Great poem, nice format and flow! I had reoccuring nightmare's, you might like "Shadow Man". I actually learned to wake myself up during such a bad dream, when I woke I was always praying and it helped. Sleeping in silence/Screaming inside is an excellent way to describe what I know all too well! Luckily it's gone away!