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The world keeps spinning, while the pain

The pain keeps festering like the corrosive salt from the acid rain that falls

It falls from an endless paradox that's a portal to the memories

Memories of the past and present of life's constant maneuvers

Reviews

[Etoiles]

I think you're off to a good start here, keep at it maybe?
It stands well as it is too, just I would've liked to keep reading.
It almost feels like you're not done with it.

[raymondb]

I like line two when you say ' The pain keeps festering like the corrosive salt from the acid rain that falls, I realy see something great in your writings ,hope too see more,