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A Poem by Roy
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My first attempt at the art of haiku... speaks about the feelings on the morning after THAT drunken night...

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The morn seems haggard.
A hand tries to reach, in vain.
The alarm screams on.

© 2008 Roy


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I just wanted to thank you for entering this poem into the "Traditional Haiku Contest." It was a very tough decision, but I really enjoyed this piece. I think what "turned me off" was your description (being after a drunken night). There was nothing in the poem to enforce that thought, so I wouldn't have known what you meant without reading the description. Other than that, though, it is really good - especially "the alarm screams on."

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yep!!We have all been there!!
You captured that feeling really well...................I'm not one for Haiku, but I understood this!

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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