Your writing really has a way of jumping out at a person. Your rhyme is strong and flow superb. This is such a powerful write. Many people go through this sort of thing after having been told the lies that they are 'fat' or 'podgy'. People are cruel sometimes and they have no idea what their words can do.
Your writing really has a way of jumping out at a person. Your rhyme is strong and flow superb. This is such a powerful write. Many people go through this sort of thing after having been told the lies that they are 'fat' or 'podgy'. People are cruel sometimes and they have no idea what their words can do.
Another very nice write. I especially like effective concise poetry, and you've done a nice job here. Overall, the poem is very strong. I only detect one obvious weak point, and that is in stanza five, the last line "Only one of my kind." This seems a bit weak and introduced only to complete the meter and rhyme of the stanza. Reading the rest of the poem, I know you can do better than this. The rest of the poem is tight and near perfect and there is no waste in the words.
Beautiful rhymes on a mightily sad topic and here it has been portrayed beautifully and honestly. Anorexia is a hard topic to touch upon as society knows things like seize zero are dangerous and yet we still call for the needs to be super thin to be pretty, in turn, compelling women to starvation for a better reflection. It's sick. But what I really loved here was the first person perspective, giving an open account. This is a unique write that you should be proud of. Given to the right people this poem could save lives. Wonderful work. It's an eye opener.
What a beautiful and strong piece it is..
Really I simply loved each and every line and its full of emotions and eternal feel.
"Fading to nothing,
fading away.
Whatever it takes,
I'm willing to pay."-Awesome ending.
Great read overall :)
Im a whopping 18 yrs old. I began writing because of some of my favorite bands and their amazing lyrics. They've inspired me and made me want to recreate some of the feelings that they've conveyed in .. more..