Midnight Spontaneuity

Yeah..this was about a girl I liked very much, but she didn't want me. I wasn't sure whether to give up or not, or even if i still liked her..and this is what I got.

It's nine o'clock but the clock says ten,
And I'm wondering if I'll go back again.
The shade of this hallucination might be fading,
I just can't tell anymore.
I try to let go but I want to hold on
And my brain is confused, with ideas: a ton.
What I see in the mirror doesn't look correct
But I just can't tell anymore.

Now it's twelve o'clock and the clock says one.
I want to get out, and need to have fun.
Running or dancing or shouting or...no.
I just can't see anymore.
Got to let them know, my friends, I love,
That that's what they are, and what I think of
When I think of love, or whatever it was.
But I just can't see anymore.

Now it's two o'clock and the clock says three,
By now I know something's wrong with me.
The room spinning as fast as my head,
But I just can't hold on anymore.
So I let go, give in to it all again,
Feel that thing that we call a sin.
Now I regret what I said earlier, blinded..
Because I just can't hold on anymore.

Now it's six o'clock and the clock is right,
I changed it in the middle of the night.
Thought it would help clear my head,
But I just don't know anymore
If it's six o'clock, five o'clock, one o'clock or ten,
Who could know, with this absence of zen?
Nothing's in focus and there's solely disarray.
Well, I just don't know anymore.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Flow]

I didn't read the part where you told us it was about a girl I believe who you were going to seduce. So when I read the poem at first I didn't know this information. It gave me the feeling of someone being drunk. As the night passes they get more drunk, as it is 12 but the clock says one, gives me the feeling of drunkenness. Time has a way of moving at different speeds when one is drunk. :) The part about your head spinning supports this thought. Now that I know it was about a woman, and I know the allure and sensual powers of women I can see that you were drunk but not from wine, you were drunk from her. I think you nailed this one, I love it.