Alone it Perfers

I wrote this a couple years ago, but re wrote it a bit and edited it. Perspective of something dark and scary.

Alone it sits, alone it prefers,
but yet it's not alone,
you speak the heat, it causes you to shutter,
you're gunna regret
messing with this one,
it’s not a runner

It doesn’t speak but it jumps at words,
it looks at you as if you have swords,
swerving to kill, it jumps and you run to hide,
a sight you can never forget,
a sight you can't define

As much as you try to please,
it looks at you as a toy and you're just a tease,
it wants your bones, skin and blood

 your trying to swim,  turn around, a flash flood,
flooded the world, it’s an ocean,
stuck in a tornado swirl, constantly moving

all you see is bodies, I tried removing
souls looked disapproving 

But it doesn't care, it doesn't breathe fresh air
 its breath is of a thousand’s suns, spin around and make you
say your prayer, but then your face to face with it, trying not to stare
your hairs sticking up on the back of your neck,
you turn behind yourself just to make a quick check,
you take a deep breath, and it’s got you in death

Reviews

[JC]

hey just noticed the title has a spelling err, perfers to prefers..

[JC]

Definitely has a foreboding predator/prey feel, like a nightmare you can't run from and the darkness overcomes you.

[Demii]

Thank you, that's what I was aiming for!

[Aphy!]

A very chilling but amazing piece! I'm really jealous because I can't write poetry...especially like this! I loved and enjoyed reading it (And some of your other stuff) Keep it up..

[Demii]

Thanks a lot :) i appreciate your feedback!

[Chris]

the "beast" within always looks out through your eyes...

[Demii]

Thank you for the reads and reviews :)

[Jimmy Yetts]

Reads like rap, to me--literate, extremely entertaining rap.
A most intriguing read!

[Demii]

Thank you ! Towards the ending my word choices seemed to end up that way. Thank you for the kind review. :)

[Not here]

Wow....um...Im not gonna be able to sleep tonight...or ever...

[Demii]

haha mission completed.

[Not here]

lol so rude. you need to write a nice little story about niceness

[Demii]

I'm joking ! thanks for the review though :)

[Not here]

no problem :)

[~]

Gahhh.. chilling to the core.. wow. you managed for me to wish for morning to come sooner tonight!

[Demii]

Thanks a bunch :)

[Sami Khalil]

"a sight you can never forget,
a sight you can't define


As much as you try to please,
it looks at you as a toy and you're just a tease,
it wants your bones, skin and blood
your trying to swim, turn around, a flash flood,
flooded the world, it’s an ocean,"

A very lovely and enjoyable read. Pen on...:)...

[Demii]

Thanks so much for the review :) & thank you !

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:0.........

[Sami Khalil]

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