Poverty

This poem is in the perspective of a child in poverty. I actually written it in 2011-2012

I breathe in the harsh winters cold,

as I sit upon the ground and weep, 

I'm alone and sore,

from my travels that I have took upon  the earth

I maybe small and young,

but my living is worth not more then a dollar to you,

I cry for my mother to hold me,

yet shes not there,

I cry for a father to teach me,

but there's no place to teach,

The summers are lonesome,

I have no friends,

I work all day to survive and gather the foods

and search hours for fresh water

My feet are bleeding, and cut with wounds

unbearable to walk without roars of pain

The tears that have fallen are enough to clean my wounds

Why Isn't anyone helping me?

Why do I half to suffer the pain, and not anyone else?

Why can't I have a mother who can hold me and sing me a lullaby, so I can finally sleep, 

without the harsh ground causing me pain

I cannot learn without a father to teach me

yet I learn on my own

Its hard to breathe, I'm losing sight of all things and all creatures around me

My hearing has left but yet I still try to move

I pray to God with the rest of the strength that I have,

Please help me

I'm a child who needs.

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Excellent!
You capture the scenario of "Poverty" through an eye of poorer/poor-child very well, who works hard to run ev'n his "Day"... thought provoking write!

[Demii]

Thanks a bunch!

[JC]

This wrings me up inside...reminding me of children I have seen on the streets of Thailand and other places...you've expressed beautifully a most tragic thing...no child deserves that life...you must have great empathy or experience to write a poem like this.

[Demii]

Awe, thank you so much for such a kind review. I don't have experience I haven't really traveled, but I try to very empathetic. Thanks for taking the time to read my work :)

[Chris]

When it's you that's poor, you seldom think to ask for anything - you're too busy doing what you need to do to get by. There is little room nor time nor even use for the self-pities... but gawd there IS room for the "anger".

[Demii]

Thanks for reviewing my stuff :)

[Ayesha Kaukab]

one thing I want to point out is that there is some problem with the punctuation marks in this poem

[Demii]

Alright thank you, I'll through it after work. :)

[Ayesha Kaukab]

awesome portrayal of a poor child's life, beautiful imagery , loved to read it......

[Demii]

Thank you a bunch :) I'm glad.

[idiotproof--1]

this is really good. it's really sad too. I enjoyed reading it I think it's a great poem. keep up the good writing

[Demii]

Thanks for the review! & yeah things like this are heartbreaking!

[Sami Khalil]

So many countries have them. So many are poor and neglected. It is a ashame on the governments and the people not to help them. A lots of money is waisted on wars and killings but not on that. An excellent write...:)....

[Demii]

I know its quite saddening to see, breaks my heart. Thank you so much for the kind review my friend :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)......

[dan]

demii*, There is a lot of heartfelt emotion in this piece, and you seem to indicate that the thought of which you write, poverty, is less a financial indicator but a person bereft of familial support and guidance. That can and is rough on a teen growing up, with little or no encouragement, nurturing and love from family one's loneliness can seem compounded and often end up pushing the teen into unhealthy relationships and situations. I hope for your sake that this is written from a made-up perspective and is not a real indicator of your situation in life. Good luck in college, and if you happen to see any of the members of Rush (Geddy, Alex or Neil) tell them dan from Pittsburgh (Indiana, PA really) says hey. Journalism should be a good fit for you, you write well and just need to learn to use spell-check some. 8^) take care...dan

[Demii]

Thank you so much for the kind review. & This is from a made up perspective, yes. & I really appreciate the kind words and everything you told me ! & yes, spell check, our best friend! Thanks again, and oh okay I will haha. :) you too!

[BlueDreams]

"The tears that have fallen are enough to clean my wounds"
Totally subtle lines.. A very poignant yet beautiful poetry :)

[Demii]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate it ! Very kind :)

[BlueDreams]

My pleasure :)

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Poverty affects us all and you have done well to examine it from your point of view. - FT

[Demii]

Thanks a lot for reading and giving your feedback! Really appreciated :)