What We Thought We All Wanted

We all want to grow up,

 but when we grow up eventually

 that reality we thought we saw, 

shows us up,

 slowly as we try to become something we are not,

 children and people we know sit alone drinking to get drunk, 

lying, having sex without a care, 

parents up all night calling you're friends who are unaware, 

but they're really just sitting there trying be calm, reality kicks in,

 your mind starts to scream, if your friends could only see your dreams,

 if the skies could only just redeem, if the positive's didn't break out the endlessness packages 

and seams, trying to keep everything in life balanced to somewhat remain the same, 

but the biggest regret we will have is not teaching our children to learn to love 

someone who want's their maiden name, 

to learn to love life until the day 

they will see love in its greatest flame

Reviews

[pvpd sri harsha]

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Afterlives
A Story by Raw is third...

[Demii]

Sorry, I'm a little confused?

[~]

I see a big contrast between what young people thought they wanted, and what became of them. I can see the strong reality throughout the poem, and the longing for love and acceptance as well as a place to belong. "love in its greatest flame" comes along only with the right person.

[Demii]

Thank's a lot, you're really good at reading into poems and understanding them, that's a great thing to have. :)

[~]

:) You are welcome demii*

[Malen]

Growing up is highly overrated.
I love the topic and your ability shines clear.

Keep up the good write!

[Demii]

Thanks for the review and reading my work :) I appreciate it lots!!

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Another great piece! You have a lot of talent Demii!!
Fantastic job..

I love the first 4 lines and the last 2 lines...
They were the most beautiful, I thought!

Great Job!

[Demii]

Thanks so much for your feedback. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

when reality comes it is usually a far cry from what we expected it to be...

maybe living in fantasy keeps that innocence alive.

we feel insulated from the bad stuff, and live like there is no tomorrow...but there is, eventually.

[Demii]

That is sadly true, but you never know the outcome of things and I guess that's the way of life. Thank you for your great review. :)

[p lawrence]

Poignant and touching. Nice work!

[Demii]

Thank you, I was hoping to aim for that sense. :)

[Helena]

This is awesome! I liked it!

[Demii]

Thanks so much !!

[pvpd sri harsha]

thanks for supporting me in my first contest.

[Demii]

you're welcome :) I have never done one before either !

[Dara]

Your thoughts and feelings just flow off the page.it reminds me of a "spoken word" piece and would be great read out loud.

[Demii]

Thanks a lot! & that sounds pretty cool actually, I always loved reading them out loud to friends. :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is an inspired lesson on how to be human.
Nice imagery.

[Demii]

Thanks alot !!