Untied Shoes

I could leave here tonight
Drive far away where no one knows my name
Get lost in a crowd
Somewhere between 10th and 12th downtown

Never come back, get my life on track.
Where did I go wrong?
When I wanted a symphony
I got another sad song.

Same old story…
Everyone’s looking for Love and Glory
Tripped on an old shoe lace
Ended up falling flat on my face.

Reviews

[EcstaticEuphoria]

This definitely hit a chord for me. I have been there so many times, I love how you brought this together and made it so poignant with the last line. I really enjoy your writing, you are extremely talented and have a lot of great content - keep it up!

[Najam Us Saher]

I liked the last stanza. When looked into its deeper meaning it can also mean that results are dependent on our own actions.

[Joey Nizz]

I loved the second part,
Where did I go wrong?
When I wanted a symphony
I got another sad song.
Really nice, well wrote.

[Surya]

That's how life is, teaches everytime but it's upto us that to learn out of it or just run away from it..:)
that's a good one..

[Mr.Writer]

This was a COOL poem! I like it a lot! :) It's actually quite different
"Tripped on an old shoe lace
Ended up falling flat on my face."
These lines were like "sad and funny"
Keep it up! :)

[Stacy Purvis]

Thank you so much! 😊😊😊

[wordman]

i think life makes us that way,always wondering,and wishing

[Stacy Purvis]

Your words mean so much to me! Thank you so much! 😁😊😂

[wordman]

always a pleasure