Grim reaper wait

Crying by night

Crying by day

I just want to be dead today

Suicidal thoughts fill my head

Why can't I just get out of bed

Pain surronds my body now

I try to move and say oh ow

Peircing sounds fill my ears

Dreaming about my greatest fears

Images flash before my eyes.

As I sit there gentle cries.

My hands start to shutter and shake

I'm in a nightmare, I just want to wake

Sleeping in my nightly counsious

Awake in my morning state.

Can the grim reaper just wait?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. The battle to see clear in your words. Death will come soon enought.
Coyote

[Michael Carr]

It was ok. I'll be honest there are cliche lines and lines that seemed forced in the rhyming scheme. I get you have emotion and you focus that pretty well. You have some talent though, that i can see, as you get older your writing will only get better. keep it up.

Mike.

[Pink Poison]

Who the f**k cares who detests the word "teenage"? It's goddamn ridiculous. You ARE what you ARE. I like this pome and the sentiments expressed therein;; and I relate to the pain. Well done!

[chloe cruz]

I think this really expresses your feelings. Great work, oh and thanks for the review you gave me. Keep it up. :D

[Eddywards]

i liked it, how it when from this to that. brilliant, don't stop.

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Good job dont change anythins :)

[Jessica Fox]

Some very deep thoughts and feelings in this work, but again you have captured everything perfectly. Excellent

[Coffin Joe]

I'm sorry but this just killed it for me

"I try to move and say oh ow"

I don't know, keep trying.
Don't let me discourage you.

Honest opinion: It just sounds too juvenile for my taste

FUN FACT: Im 17, I detest the word "teenage" as well.