I feel cheap

like a bronze hooker
on a 9 a.m.
Monday morning
sipping coffee from a
cup with red lipstick stains
in pantie hose and dontfuckme pumps

Satan in a Sunday hat
isn't so bad, at least
he dressed up
for the
occasion.

Reviews

[terry smith]

Love the imagery!! you paint a picture with very few words.

[Dream Weaver]

Humorous and chic with a twist.
nice write...

[.]

LOL brilliant, witty,clever and the last stanza magic!!

[T]

Well done and gritty.

[Alessander]

great use of imagery., the lipstick, the pumps, sets a gritty tone. simile - really like "like a bronze hooker'"

One smallll suggestion, maybe "Styrofoam" cup - don't know, for some reason I picture the red lipstick imprint on a Styrofoam cup, and I think it would only add to trashiness of the tone, if that makes anysense. Tight write!

[fireblossom]

clever ... a real city morning after apartment with a bit of a funky smell in the air...(stale air I mean :-)

Nice.