puppet master

my fantasy when it comes to a certain person

 

you think you're in control,

but i hold your life in my hands.

just a silly puppet on some strings.

easy to influence,

easy to overcome.

 

i'm in your mind,

i dominate your thoughts.

you don't even know i'm there.

 

i know the things that get to you,

i can manipulate

your hidden vulnerabitilities.

 

i am the only one that can

make you feel,

make you hurt.

i won't let you forget.

i won't let you move on.

this is your life now,

and it's in my control.

 

Author's Note

draft number two.
care to review?

Reviews

[*** Hey Jude***]

Fortunately I have lived long enough to see karma in action. What we give to our partners we receive, so please don't ever desire someone to control you. I could not expressed or relate to you have many people I'm sure you know can relate to this powerful piece. Love isn't real when you have to be a cadged bird. Unable to fly without permission. Great narration. Blessings ~ Jude :-)

[Breezie Kae]

So I love how our pictures look almost the same except reversed. XD
But really. I like this. It's very structured for free-form writing.

[SM Davis]

Don't allow anyone to rent space in your head for free. I agree with Lizette. An old chinese proverb says "the one who loves the least controls the relationship". It is only when you can face adversity without emotion but rather a sense of curiosity that you know no one can control you but you. It's a peaceful and serene place to be. Nicely emotive piece.

[closed]

Dark.

You have a very direct approach to your art. It's unmistakable here that you're a predator with a single target in mind. Lol, it's entertaining. Just a word of warning though...

And take it from someone who knows. Revenge is sweet. But take it too far, and it'll consume you. Because in all honesty, you'll come out better just walking away, and moving on.

Set your mind free, and fly away.

-Dream

[Lizanne]

Interesting, those that think they are doing the playing are actually the ones being played. Keep the control! Good little masterpiece in very short form. Straight and to the point.

[~Shadow Kissed~]

i like it :)