Why Is It

Why is it that

no matter how much I drink

I'm still thirsty

no matter how much I eat

I'm still hungry

 

Why is it that

you give me everything

but I still yearn for more

you give me everything

but I walk out the door

 

Why is it that

no matter how much you love me

you can’t prove it

no matter how much you love me

you don’t show it

 

Why is it that

I can smile through the pain

but not when you’re around

I can smile when you’re gone

but not when you’re around

Author's Note

This probably sounds incredibly raw and may not flow right...
Please be honest with your ratings. Honest, not harsh.

Reviews

[Andy Ruffett]

I think it's fine, and I'm not being harsh. It's very true to the point and the cravings you feel but just can't have.

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

very well written
Nice wording
Good job!

[Bloodthirsty Poppet]

Very Nice. I can completely understand this. Keep up the good work.

[fernii]

I like it. Great poem. Keep wriiting :)

[Shiningwolf]

Excellent! You seem like you can never have enough of one thing and it makes you sad, and when a person that comes around where you should smile you don't. You want to tell them what's wrong but then again you don't. Very nice.

[ashylynn_love]

I think it's good!

[howlfjdks]

Lonliness and hunger that does not quench the heart or satisfy the soul.

[diannesam]

I think it flows perfectly, and how you used the hunger and thirst expression in the first part was good because the reader knows what the poem is talking about without any confusion. It's good how you ask questions, because it can connect to the reader as well. Another great poem :)