Dig

Dig your nails into my skin
Slowly pull them down
Let the blood
Gush. Out.

 

Dig your sweet words into my mind
Slowly turn them bitter
Let the lies
Come. Out.

 

Dig your teeth into my neck
Slowly make me scream
Let it all
Sink. In.

 

Dig the blame into my heart
Slowly make me believe it
Let it grow
In. Me.

 

Dig your way into my life
Slowly go and disappear
Let it all
Slip. Away.

Reviews

[Sophia Marie]

I love this poem, the format, word choice, and force within each stanza comes through so powerfully. I really liked how each section ended with the two word chunks, great sounds and wonderfully emotionally fueled piece.

[Katannaism]

I really liked this. It has a dark chilly feel about it and it's also straightforward. However, I didn't really agree with the 1st stanza, 2nd line:
Slowly pull them down. Especially when the nails is supposedly pushed into the 'skin' instead.
Nevertheless, a nice, haunting piece. Keep it up!

[Kenfucius69]

This was well written and thought out. I could hear it sung in my mind. Great job!

[TKBickel]

A poem with an old school structure and small simple words with a lot of impact-vision and emotion. I’m glad Chris Yip recommended the poem.
Here are three simple words to sum it up. I Love it.

[Unam]

Very nice and well structured. I like the use of words.

[Tai Ryens]

This has such strong emotions and a strong message to it, if interpreted right. The way I translated this into thoughts, it seemed a bit dark, just the way I love it. Excellent work. Keep it up~

[AK]

Very stron and very nice! Great write!

[lei]

wow a strong one.. i like it!

[Chris Yip]

Excellent poem with an interesting structure that echos throughout it making it magnified in expression and simplistic power. Sinks in real deep and is an attention grabber. Very original. Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

A intense and strong poem. Create vision of pain and pleasure with a bad ending already planned. I like the desire and the strong ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote