regret

regret

A Poem by Hmhmhm
"

i really want to know what people think of this, PLEASE review

"

triggering affection

begging me to not leave, stay apart of this collection 

and i gotta say it's the part of my mind's reflection

i'm coming to feel regret

i didnt mean to make you upset

you fall and i see the shame

all i think is i'm the one to blame

i wanted to tell you that i care

i know i gave you quite a scare

--unfinished-

© 2010 Hmhmhm


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Hmhmhm
ignore spelling and such

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Hmmm... I am not quite sure I understood what you wanted us to understand from this. Its a little raw but for such a short poem it has really good rhymes... Its just a bit unclear the way it is... But besides that its a good try. You should keep writing cus you have potencial...

Kudos! ^_^

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Hmhmhm
Hmhmhm

Southern California, CA



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