I Didn't do it

i think this is one of my better poems.

this isn't my fault.
you made your oun assault.
this isn't my fault.
you judged by default.
this isn't my fault.
but now the words are in.
i didn't make this sin.
sweat poors off my skin.
i didn't make this sin.
battery charge within.
i didn't make this sin.
this is what i hate.
i do not feel taht great.
i cannot think straight.
i do not feel that great.
we'll all die at this rate.
i do not feel that great.

Reviews

[deeps]

Yes what is it you didn't do?
This is wonderful you have a great rhythm and flow going on

[lawrence bear]

very nice, but it has , me wondering. What is it you didn't do?
Great piece, but you have a flaw in the second line, you spelled oun, which is own. and in the 11th line, taht, suppose to be that. Just those two, other than that, its good.