Love; An absence of Hate

Love; An absence of Hate

A Poem by Kaitlin

Some say love is blind-

More like an absence of mind.

A mind flourishing with ignorance

And growing arrogance.

 

A soft kiss

Was no longer my dying wish.

Your gleaming eyes

Were my personal high.

 

With cupid’s arrow we were struck

Could this only be luck?

Our hearts soared

Only longing for more.

 

But time only passes

With rose-colored glasses.

Feelings of regret grow

Was this just another show?

 

A broken heart-

Feels more like a work of art.

A tear falls with a splash

Everything ends with a crash.

 

Goodbyes are bade

And memories fade

Never to again to speak

Of the times that are now so bleak.

© 2010 Kaitlin


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Dom
This is awesome. It flowed very well. Great job! :D

Posted 14 Years Ago


Really great write.

Posted 14 Years Ago


i really like this write. the title definitely encompasses the overall feeling of the poem from the optimistic, fairytale beginning to the realism of the closing lines. i especially enjoy the last lines "goodbyes are bade and memories fade". the poem really summarizes the happiness of a relationship until the bitter end. great write!

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like the rhyme. I usually don't rhyme unless I'm told to for an English assignment. I really liked it. Nice progression. Could be a real relationship. Love, kiss, regret, and the break-up. Baeutiful write.

Posted 14 Years Ago


To me, this poem seems to have a masculine vibe to it for some reason. You captured the them perfectly, but there's such resolve in your words. It feels almost as if a very logical person is candidly speaking about emotion. I wonder if they have ever been head over heels before.

It's very lyrical. The energy in the words come across like wave after wave on a windy beach. I find your writing style in this poem to be violent. The reader has not time to recover from the last stanza before they are hit again. In a live performance you will need this style to break the ice. The audience will definitely give you their undivided attention.

Posted 14 Years Ago


*presses like button*

very full of emotion =]

Posted 14 Years Ago



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