pieces

I feel like this and it's all because of one person

Pieces

The Pieces I hold are not to a broken glass

nor a crystal

nor a star

They are pieces to something special I used to have

The Pieces I hold are unable to  fix with glue

nor tape

not anything

It something much more than that

The Pieces I hold are shattered and broken

not half broken

not fixed and not put together

They were stomped on by you and kicked in the dirt

The Pieces I hold go to my heart

It was something special I used to have

Your love is the only glue to fix my broken heart, but you decided not  to show

me love anymore and the glue started to fade

away...

 

Reviews

[ebur™]

this expression is displayed greatly in here. it was really sad.... but the poem I that was good. And I kept on reading because I wanted to know what 'The Pieces' went to so that was really effective. Nice work. :)

[Jacky Bones]

P.S. I found your poem to be a bit unnecessarily redundant in some places and the bit about the "love glue" just seemed extremely awkward. The time line seems like it was badly put together and I would suggest re-wording the last part.

[Jacky Bones]

sorry to say the flow and the wording are not as strong in this one
it seams to have a rhythm then out of no way it gets all choppy and it doesn't repeat that or have
a reason to do that
the words that were used dont seam to fit what you are trying to say
there would be really great words that do express a much deeper pain then the average ones
it doesnt seam to go any where it should at least have a climax to it
cause it feels very flat
the imagery is also feeks pretty feeble the first three lines were very well written but it falls through after that,
it seams to take a little to long to get to the point for a short poem like this and its a little too forward for my taste
im not trying to be mean
just my two cents

[Jane Doe]

awwwwwwwww its very prettyfullish

[MoonlitAngel]

I'm sorry :( This was really sad, and absolutely exploded with emotion. Good write :)

--Blood

[deeps]

Sorry you were hurt,
This is an emotional write here,
Expressed well!