Bubble of Doom

A new song I'm working on. Feedback anybody?

 Bubble of Doom

When I was young someone told me

That I’d be haunted by the ghosts of my past

And all the trials that I’d face during life

Would all bare fruit but it surely won’t last.

Well now I’m haunted by this forgotten pain

Spectres of the ones I loved the most

I never thought they’d end up hung in my gallows

Especially when I always held them so close.

That dread feeling that’s growing in my heart

Is far colder than any physical room

It’s getting harder to avoid being martyred

While I’m drowning in this bubble of doom.

(break)

Everyone I loved forgets their promises made

I hold them close without a second thought

How could I have known what my chastisement would be

For simply opening a scarred and bleeding heart?

Yea I remember those fleeting notes of pleasure

Even they can’t bring me in from the cold

It’s kind of sick the way I torture myself

I wonder if I’m better off all alone.

Reviews

[Pax]

"It’s kind of sick the way I torture myself"

- Its reminds me of our human nature and the saying, we create our own prison cell or we become prisoners of our own doing.

"That I’d be haunted by the ghosts of my past"

- somehow, one way or the other... we are haunted by our past in our daily lives, but that doesn't mean we can't fight it off, there are many ways to handle regrets/pain/mistakes of our past, we fight our own demons everyday... that's to say :)

I like the song, it bleeds what reality is like... :)
keep it up, my friend...