Morning Person

The poisons in my veins are yet

to leave me

they nestle sweetly buzzing

await their farewell bite

bodies surround me

sticky with sickly morning sweat

sleep, hard-fought, has taken them

stale breath forms clouds 

above us all

limbs ache and heavy heads

loll carelessly on makeshift beds

the wounds that at conception

were nothing to us

insist on being felt

murmers and grunts

join the morning chorus

only I am there to hear

the disjointed harmony

of the flightness birds I find

snoozing at my feet. 

Reviews

[Lovecraft]

Sounds like a terrific orgy, lol. Damn, I hate being awake in the morning. Very descriptive and the visuals are quite depressing in their representation.

Overall, pretty good job! ;)

[Gaurav]

Some mornings bring back the memories of dull affairs of the yesterday and a day-ahead. The body will not accept the life is what it means. A good imaginary there.

[ReedWrite]

they nestle sweetly buzzing
await their farewell bite

Love that line...so descriptive, with its own kind of bite. Great poem...full of imagery that grabs the reader and pulls them into the emotion. Nicely done.

[Mr. Lopez]

I had the impression that this was a drug house with a bunch of people partying for days and all coming down together. I'm probably completely wrong but it was just my take on it. Nonetheless it's an interesting write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a coincidence...i am just now reading this poem and listening to the soundtrack of Romeo and Juliet...and this reminds me of when he was exiled and she would have to wake without him near...and i also remember a love who departed for another country and how suddenly lonely the mornings became..

beautiful poem, Alias.

j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful use of words and thoughts. You create images and left the reader with something to think about. Thank you Alias for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Re-Pete]

"the wounds that at conception
were nothing to us
insist on being felt" - favorite lines

You have a way of putting words together that make them jump off the page and into the soul.
I can feel every word of this. Most excellent write.

[Asante]

Wonderfully written with lovely imagery in tow. I really enjoyed the styling of this. Wouldn't change a thing. :)

[wordman]

a wonderful story about the morning,birds singing at your feet,loved it !

[Nickdykstra]

Good job ! Great detail, keep up good work , write.laugh.love ...