Hands

I love your hands

for all they do

and all they're yet to hold

for all they've learned

to write, to feel

Their adventures are untold

I love each callous 

for all it tells

of toil that you've spent

of endless hours

on things you love

your talents and intent

I love each scar

Each sun-kissed fold

That marked you in years past

the nicks, the cuts

That each have healed

But still they left their mark

I love your hands

for all they are

and all they're yet to be

they'll hold me tight

and live through fights

and they've left their scars on me

Author's Note

This needs some tweaks so please don't hesitate to make suggestions, there are a few weak lines I think

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This poem is virtually perfect!! My only suggestion is to complete the rhyme with "past"/"mark", which is the only stanza that doesn't have a complete rhyme, and with the musicality, it's easily noticeable, and it kind of mars the poem a bit given the rest follows a rather systematic scheme. Otherwise, every line is brilliant!! Well done!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and honest words. My favorite kind.
"I love your hands
for all they are
and all they're yet to be
they'll hold me tight
and live through fights
and they've left their scars on me"
The above lines solid and real life. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Hmm, great story telling style you have. It reads like prosetry. I enjoyed this a lot!

[PoeticSorcery]

the attempt at least was good, if it does in fact needs tweaks. personally I hate tweaking stuff after working hard on it, not that I'm not open to suggestions myself lol. anyways, I still liked this.

[WritersBlock]

Interestingly interesting.

[Scheherazade]

I thought this was a simple yet potent writing. It's late and I'm tired otherwise I might find some criticisms but again, too brain dead to say anything other than I enjoyed it.

[Raylci]

I love how you can take any topic in the universe and dress it up or down. You choose hands and I think it works. If you feel like there's room for improvement reread it and tell us what you decide to do.

[Dash the Reaper]

I love your hands
for all they are
and all they're yet to be
they'll hold me tight
and live through fights
and they've left their scars on me



i see some one is in love here,great way to express you feelings keep it up

[Jacob Clifford]

Very romantically written. I've never thought about the tales that hands can tell. I love the original concept, and I especially like the tie-in with the first and last stanzas.

[wordman]

loved it ! we take a lot of things for granted,but the guidance we receive never leaves us
loved the theme of the write