What Next?

So close, I am, to being free

To reach that immortality

of boundless youth

And endless years

Untouched, as yet,

By 'grown up' fears.

So close, I am, to reaching that

Forever dream so far off at

Some future place

So often seen

That I'd forgot

It was not fantasy

So close, I'm scared

Without that dream, I'm bared

That's it, I've done

All I planned to do

And I'll be spent

By twenty-two

So close, excited see

To reach that immortality

But it won't last 

Which has me vexed

Then, I'm scared to ask

What next?

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the fear of what comes next---or if we will make the right decisions...check second stanza, fifth line.

i like this...had me singing Simon and Garfunkel...

"i was twenty-one years when i wrote this song, i'm twenty-two now, but i won't be for long; time hurries on, and the leaves that are green turn to brown."

j.

[Alias]

Thanks for pointing that out - i fixed it! And what a great lyric - what song is it from?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"Leaves that are Green" from the Sounds of Silence album...

[Lovecraft]

Exquisite...

The themes and concepts are universal in their applications. A mourning of youth and a fear of growing older, feeling that you won't be able to have fun and do the things you like to do.

This poem is very good, Alias! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A hard world to be young in.
So close, I'm scared
"Without that dream, I'm bared
That's it, I've done
All I planned to do
And I'll be spent
By twenty-two"
I understand the above lines. I have four children. Working hard and struggling. I tell them. Go forward and keep learning. All we can do. I liked the poem. Made the reader think and ponder. Thank you Alias for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[PoeticSorcery]

good rhyming style and overall flow and feeling.

[Dash the Reaper]

at the end i had to ask myself again WHAT NEXT,nicely written and keep it up

[zunie frost]

Beautifully written.i love the starting line.very clever way of writing

[Re-Pete]

As Thoreau wrote, "live deep and suck out all the marrow of life". And as the character Andy Dufresne said in 'The Shawshank Redemption', "Get busy living, or get busy dying". Only you can decide what's next but whatever it is do it the max & have no regrets. The sky is the limit. Very thought provoking. Nicely done.

Regards

[Inject Positivity]

The thoughts of unknown future scares us, it makes our heartbeat tremble... I loved the concept and the way you put your thoughts in this write with a vision of life and it's memories... Who knows something great is going to happen next... Superb job...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[wordman]

so close,yet so far away..

[samarahmed]

I enjoyed the feelings and emotions, great poem!